Integrated writing (TPO 44)
In the reading section, the writer contends that there are several evidence that some archeologists believe that the coin which brought by European explorers known as the Norse to America a thousand years ago is a historical fake including great distance from Norse settlements in Canada, no other coins found in the region, and the Norse who traveled to North America would have understood that silver coins would be useless to them. However, in the lecture, the professor casts doubt on the reading points by presenting some reasons and examples.
First of all, the writer claims that the Native American site in Maine where the coin was discovered is located very far from other sites which documented Norse presence. Conversely, in the lecture, the professor rejects this notion by stating that many other objects were found from the Natives were from far places in North America. Also the Natives of the North America may obtained the coin from far places and brought it back with themselves. It was a really common phenomenon which Native American acquired objects from other places.
Furthermore, contrary to the idea in the reading part suggesting that no other coins have been found at the Canadian sites that were inhabited by the Norse, the lecturer asserts that European explorers were not native to America, and they might return back to Europe and took the coins with them. As a matter of fact, it is completely possible that they brought the coins with them to America, and then took them back to Europe and lost just one.
In addition, even though the writer mentions that the Norse who traveled to North America would have understood that silver coins would most likely be useless to them in America, the professor denotes that although Native American didn't know about the value of money, they valued unusual objects, and they might use the coin as a piece of jewelry, and preserved it as something valuable.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 60, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun evidence seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some evidence'.
Suggestion: some evidence
...ion, the writer contends that there are several evidence that some archeologists believe that th...
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Line 2, column 335, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... were from far places in North America. Also the Natives of the North America may ob...
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Line 3, column 246, Rule ID: RETURN_BACK[1]
Message: Use simply 'return'.
Suggestion: return
...e not native to America, and they might return back to Europe and took the coins with them....
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Line 4, column 232, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...r denotes that although Native American didnt know about the value of money, they val...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, first, furthermore, however, may, really, so, then, in addition, as a matter of fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1605.0 1373.03311258 117% => OK
No of words: 325.0 270.72406181 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93846153846 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3611731113 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 145.348785872 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473846153846 0.540411800872 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 502.2 419.366225166 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 21.2450331126 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 119.970160899 49.2860985944 243% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 178.333333333 110.228320801 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.1111111111 21.698381199 166% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.8888888889 7.06452816374 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.635169906969 0.272083759551 233% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.251469730897 0.0996497079465 252% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146433855989 0.0662205650399 221% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.372906755408 0.162205337803 230% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542696175222 0.0443174109184 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.9 13.3589403974 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 53.8541721854 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.0289183223 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 63.6247240618 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.7273730684 172% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.498013245 156% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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