Do you agree or disagree with the following statement-”television advertising directed towards young children (2-5 year olds) should not be allowed”Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement-
”television advertising directed towards young children (2-5 year olds) should not be allowed”
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by Kotresa on Sun, 05/12/2019 - 08:21

The television advertisements should not be directed towards the younger audience. In this passage I will discuss about the negative impacts which these advertisements may have on their younger audience. However, I admit that this is not the absolute statement, many times television advertisement do prove useful for the children.
The first negative impact of these advertisements is the stubbornness and the tantrums. Everyone in their life would have seen a child crying and screaming because his/her parents refuse to buy them the latest game or any good. The ads which show children enjoying a certain game, candy or a good, makes the younger audience crave for the product. This craving then leads to the child pestering his/her parents to buy the good without fully understanding the money value and affordability of the product. Not having the desired good becomes a source of anxiety and anguish for the child and a source of unhappiness for the parents.
The second unfortunate consequence of these advertisements is child’s addiction to the good. The collectable items like Pokémon cards, action hero cards or even hot wheels car collections make the kids go crazy. The kids try to complete their collections as much as they can without thinking of the amount of money they’re spending. Moreover the company continuously releases new collections and cards for profit. The craziness over these collectables slowly becomes an addiction and the kids spend a lot of time and money over it with no tangible benefits.
The third impact is that the advertisements, especially the ones which show action stunts and other dangerous activities to attract customers, can put the child’s life in danger. Seeing the child actors in the ads doing car stunts or saving civilians in some game ads can influence the child audience on thinking that they can also do it. The children, with their limited understanding about these stunts, think that the content was real. This can put the child in risky conditions as they will try to imitate the stunts.
However, we also have seen many advertisements which aim at the younger audience and try to have a good impact on them. Some advertisements of Dettol, Colgate and other brands also try to impart knowledge about personal hygiene, assisting others and other good qualities.
In conclusion, advertisements do have many negative consequences for the younger audience but these negatives cannot completely over rule the positives. If the company’s pay attention to the social impact of their advertisements and try to sensitize them, then these ads can be deemed to have positive influence on children.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... fully understanding the money value and affordability of the product. Not having...
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...car collections make the kids go crazy. The kids try to complete their collections ...
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Suggestion: Moreover,
... amount of money they're spending. Moreover the company continuously releases new c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, third, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2244.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21860465116 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97523217413 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488372093023 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 687.6 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.9374252919 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.857142857 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4761904762 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12543366765 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479727867436 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623505767415 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0771333015065 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587676260396 0.0645574589148 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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