Some say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help other. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Over the past decades, the gap between the rich and the poor has never ceased to draw public attention and provoke debates. Although social hierarchy is ever-present, the issue as to whether the rich should give a helping hand to others or not remains controversial. In my opinion, donation or other form of contribution is necessary for the following reasons.
Firstly, it is important to recognize that donators and sponsors of social activities are beneficiaries, many may argue that only recipients are benefited. However, they should take into account the fact that the rich are have many psychological problems such as the felling of loneliness, isolation. For example, most of their social relations are prone to superficial, transient and ad-hoc. Thereby having a tranquil friendship, companionship is difficult among the rich. This example indicates that philanthropists who have financial affordability and willingness to help others in need often will gain psychological reward like inner peace, sense of satisfaction, mutual understanding hardship of others.
Secondly, it is equally important to recognize that patrons who spend money to help local community or contribute to social fund play an instrumental role in the improvement of living quality. Opponents may argue that their contribution makes little difference. However, the are ignorant of the fact that many event-consistent problems that cannot be solved effectively by governments only. For instance, many social problems such as encourage of the education, accommodation for the impoverish or the global problems like food supply crisis, infectious epidemic, natural disaster need long-tern commitment and huge fund. Therefore, only government’s effort is insufficient to help the difficult situation residents because they have to pay attention in others issue. this example shows that concerted and join force by government and sponsors are needed.
In conclusion, not only does it bring psychological rewards to themselves but also contribute to the effort of addressing social problems of government as mentioned above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 184, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...al hierarchy is ever-present, the issue as to whether the rich should give a helping hand to ...
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Line 2, column 105, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Many
...of social activities are beneficiaries. many may argue that only recipients are bene...
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Line 2, column 105, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much may', 'a good deal of may'.
Suggestion: much may; a good deal of may
...of social activities are beneficiaries. many may argue that only recipients are benefite...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...gue that only recipients are benefited. this argument could be true to some extent. ...
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Line 2, column 200, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
... argument could be true to some extent. however, they should take into account the fact...
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Line 2, column 266, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...into account the fact that the rich are have many psychological problems such as the...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...panionship is difficult among the rich. this example indicates that philanthropists ...
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Line 2, column 634, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[10]
Message: The adverb 'often' is usually put between 'will' and 'gain'.
Suggestion: will often gain
... and willingness to help others in need often will gain psychological reward like inner peace, ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...ion of donator sector is insignificant. however, the are ignorant of the fact that many...
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Line 3, column 280, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...nator sector is insignificant. however, the are ignorant of the fact that many event-co...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...age of the education, accommodation for the impoverish or the global problems like food supply...
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Suggestion: This
... have to pay attention in others issue. this example shows that concerted and join f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1844.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.65644171779 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25869682112 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592024539877 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0563724945 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.470588235 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1764705882 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.76470588235 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117464977286 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0385782759839 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409170208022 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0657983983904 0.151304729494 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452299851327 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.55 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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