A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
The premise of a national curriculum prior to college is a very popular and universally used practice in several nations across the globe. Ultimately, it has served the students well and has led to significant benefit to the nation's economy. However, I believe that with a national curriculum we have tipped the scales too strongly in one direction. As a society, we have gained the benefits of standardized testing which has allowed streamlined application and testing processes at the cost of the overall goal of education. Which are emotional and intellectual growth through understanding, application, and retention of several fields of study and fundamental theories, philosophies, and practices of existence.
In response to the response to the written statement, I propose that before college, the national curriculum within a nation should serve more as a guide and should avoid being rigid in its structure or application. Minimizing notions of what a student ought to do with the information they are learning with a larger emphasis on giving the student the tools to decide how best the information can lead to the most satisfying life possible. It is interesting to note that within the statement itself, there is a strong presupposition that the goal of pre-college education is to prepare a student for college and not to prepare the student to be a student of life.
I was born in Zimbabwe where I went to a boarding school before attending college at the University of Illinois in Urbana-Champaign, where I graduated with a 3.7 GPA with a degree in Civil in Engineering. Within my home culture, there is a strong value for pursuing tertiary education, however, I would like to propose that it was not necessarily the classroom material that best prepared me for my college experience, rather it was how the classroom material was taught and the type of environments that were created and fostered inside and outside of the classroom. Firstly, as students, our first 2 years of high school, our classes were predetermined, but for years 3 to 6, we chose what classes we wanted to take. For the last 2 years of high school, there was an emphasis on selecting classes based on what you would like to do after school, accompanied with career guidance. While I chose to do Maths, Physics, and Chemistry with a desire to improve the standard of living by developing public infrastructure, this experience allowed some of my cohorts to pursue Art, Design and Technology, and Business Studies, giving them the tools to create their own businesses or enter trades after graduating. Secondly, was the quality of friendships that were fostered outside of the classroom. Since my school was a boarding school, we all lived together, ate together, studied together and played together. This allowed us to grow an understanding of very similar base values while learning from each other and developing a strong sense of interdependence.
In conclusion, I would like to propose that a nation should not look to simply implement a national curriculum for the purpose of college entry, rather, a nation should look to create a national curriculum that teaches students to discover their passions, grow intellectually and emotionally, be strong benefactors to society and learn to be students of life.
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- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 226, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...d has led to significant benefit to the nations economy. However, I believe that with a...
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Line 3, column 144, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...culum within a nation should serve more as a guide and should avoid being rigid in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, well, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 94.0 58.6224719101 160% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2768.0 2235.4752809 124% => OK
No of words: 543.0 442.535393258 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09760589319 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82725184711 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06714271718 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489871086556 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 874.8 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.1741409109 60.3974514979 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.823529412 118.986275619 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.9411764706 23.4991977007 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17647058824 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244067158889 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752401112482 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0947950294551 0.0758088955206 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184229806032 0.150359130593 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10242426365 0.0667264976115 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 14.1392134831 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.8420337079 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 100.480337079 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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