Figures show that in some countries, there is an ever-increasing proportion of population
aged 15 or younger. What do you think the effect of current and future in those countries?
Over the past decades, demographical change has never failed to draw public attention and
provoke debates. Although there is a dramatic increase in the number of young people in many
countries, the issue as to whether this development has negative influence on countries or not
remains unclear. In this essay, I will examine the present and future impacts of the rise in the
population of children.
Firstly, it is important to recognize that the higher the increase in the number of children, the higher
demand for schools and teachers. some may argue that current educational systems in developed
countries can host all students in schooling ages. this argument could be true to some extent.
However, they should take into account the fact that many countries, especially developing ones do
not have enough schools to admit all the children. For example, in China the number of school-aged
children is very high due to baby booming; nevertheless, the country has failed to meet the
subsequent increase in demand for teaching facilities. this example indicates that while attending
classes is the primary need in human hierarchical demand, many students may not have access to
quality education in future.
Secondly, it is equally important to recognize that the rise in the number of young people will lead
to higher unemployment in the future. The opponents may argue that as labor-intensive economies
have transferred to knowledge-based economies, youngers will constitute major workforce in
countries. However, they are ignorant of the fact that when potential workers cannot find jobs in
their country, they will be forced to emigrate. this leads to the undesirable brain drain. For example,
as numerous applicants are in the same race for single position, finding employment will become
more difficult. this example shows that governments should take joblessness as a potential risk
posed by the rise of in the number of youngsters.
In conclusion, under no circumstances should governments underestimate the impact of growing
population of children below the age of 15. this trend not only calls for the allocation of more
resources to education but also demands the generation of more jobs as mentioned above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...lation of children below the age of 15. this trend not only calls for the allocation...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, while, as to, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1910.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 354.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39548022599 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92664092534 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54802259887 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5203182832 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.352941176 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8235294118 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 25.0 4.38176352705 571% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0986055420242 0.244688304435 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0310225668795 0.084324248473 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0313572289568 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0248130308332 0.151304729494 16% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270411542842 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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