Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities
It is unquestionable that young people can have a huge impact on their society. Most people argue that nowadays young people devote more time to helping their community. However, I am of the opinion that youngsters allot less time to make contributions to their community. In the following essay, I will vindicate my stance through three noticeable reasons.
To begin with, in the hectic life of today, young people have no time helping society. In fact, they are busy doing their homework in the university or dealing with the excessive workload. To illustrate this, when I was younger, I participated in different city projects like picking up the litter, purchasing pieces of stuff that old people needed and so forth. After I went to university, however, I had to devote all of my time doing the assignments in order to get a good grade. Had I not have to cope with the huge volume of assignments, I could have contributed to bettering my community.
Another equally significant point is that the advent of the internet has significantly reduced face-to-face communication. In fact, people even do not know their neighbors. Also, the addicting games allure young people’s attention so much that they prefer to spend their time playing these games. For instance, my father told me that in the past, young people assembled together in order to spend their free time because there were no internet and cell phones to entertain them, talking about their problems. As a result of knowing their problems, they gave themselves financial or mental support, benefiting the community around them in this way. This example shows that the appearance of the internet makes young people care less about their communities.
Last but not least, in today’s sophisticated world, the price of everything people need has dramatically increased, forcing people to have two different jobs in order to afford such huge costs. On the contrary, in the past, the prices of food, purchasing a house and so on was not high that one job could meet people’s need. In this regard, young people have enough time to participate in activities that benefited their community.
All in all, today young people make less contribution to their community because the workload and the volume of assignments which young people deal with have drastically augmented. Also, the invention of the internet distracts young people’s attention from caring about their communities. Furthermore, the rise in prices makes people devote most of their time taking part in several occupations.
- TPO 27 80
- It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only 3 days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work 5 days a week for shorter hours TPO 30 70
- In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes rather than ton work slowly and make sure that everything is correct. 70
- it is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' job than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents' job- TPO 26 66
- One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 615, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding community'?
Suggestion: the surrounding community
...financial or mental support, benefiting the community around them in this way. This example shows that th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, for instance, in fact, talking about, as a result, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2159.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17745803357 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87321193122 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520383693046 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5686492635 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.80952381 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.80952380952 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.429238782782 0.236089414692 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139992448333 0.076458572812 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104417129219 0.0737576698707 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255550549564 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0605872708916 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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