More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries.
Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Nowadays, all over the word we can see the increase percentage of opacity, among population. Almost 30 to 40% of teenager are having this detrimental problem. Furthermore, it cause a serious issues especially for the very expensive countries. In this essay we will discuss some reasons and effects of this problem.
As explanation of the most causes we will start with the most dangerous hiding one which is the applications nowadays which have the ability to bring what ever you want to your home by just ordering from them. Such as, food, gifts, and medical stuff.For example, if their Mom wants to order a particular thing from the market, instead of go walking or by car they just open the one of the applications and order in a minutes. Secondly a lot of mothers now have a job so they will not have an enough time to cook or prepare the food for her children, as response to that matter the fast food is a solution.
Although, as we now this will effect the human who live in that environment. For example, the raise in opacity percentage, Which will lead to increase in disease like diabetes, and hypertension. Rather than being hidden away from confrontation and even from the community as well. Lastly the loose of confident as well as enthusiasm, and lack of good personality.
In conclusion, a huge number of children in developed country becoming overweight, although this WILL effect the wealthy country. The government should work on how to limit this extended issue and increase the people awareness.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1264.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84291187739 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75308085724 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.632183908046 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 390.6 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.597261193 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2307692308 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0769230769 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15384615385 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272981688508 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0944785897977 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0904763376055 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163699626928 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826191540119 0.056905535591 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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