Some People think that family has an influence on child's development, while others think that there are many factors that influence child such as television, music and friends.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, parents handle a big responsibility to manage and improve children intelligence, since they are the closest person to contact with. While the other think that entertaining media such as television and music are some options that could improve children’s intelligence. Television could influence the children since it give a beneficial visual effect for children. While parents are also important since they protect and influence. However, parents should keep up and have more responsibility for their children while they grow up.
On the one hand, parents support to influence the children is the most needed thing for the children. In this case, parents are the main person who can control and teach their children regularly. The effect that is influenced by the parents to their children have more sense to improve the children’s intelligence. For instance, a child who are grown up by their parents will be faster to improve the skills since their parents control them and teach them some good values by deliver it with their own way which is easier to be understood.
On the other hand, entertainment Medias are also have a big role to develop children’s intelligence. since the visual effect that can attract the children to see the educational program which can be used for them to gain and develop their knowledge. Based on a research from Birmingham university, some entertainment media such as music has a big role since they could deliver a knowledge from the song or maybe they use any adorable visual effect that could attract the children.
In conclusion, both of parents and entertainment media have benefits for improving children intelligence. the first could improve the motoric neuron by protect them. While the other could affect by their attracting visual effect. However, parents role have the most responsibility since they have the main role to teach and educate their children.
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| 2019-08-06 | Wildanfars | 56 | view |
| 2019-02-01 | Valeria Surkina | 84 | view |
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, may, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1622.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23225806452 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90871166292 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 176.041082164 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.41935483871 0.561755894193 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1488577227 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.375 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.375 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8125 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0880999955496 0.244688304435 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0403764148501 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0470215284769 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0613410092878 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312010835517 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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