Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
I do not agree with the recommendation as I believe that the security and defence of the nation is of paramount importance and should be cardinal in investment from government.
In today's world where we have apprehension, trade hostilities and power struggle among nations, it is necessary that a country invest substantially in its military power. There are numerous examples of such types of struggles such as political trade struggles between China and USA or the struggles between India and Pakistan at Kashmir borders. We cannot really expect the countries that are directly involved in such grave feuds that can devolve into a war at anytime and concern the well-being of the entire nation to focus as much on art as it does on military. These countries need to invest as much as possible to maintain and further bolster a strong army.
Apart from the political enmity, crimes such as terrorism stalks the world like a hydra headed demon. Aside from terrorism, there is internal strife like the rise of Naxalites in India which require the intervention from the military. Today the importance of military is more than ever as the security of the nations is at a very delicate position. The security is required to be alert, diligent and perpetuating to deal with any and all kinds of danger at any time. The military requires more manpower and resources than ever and hence, it needs more investment and support from the government than ever.
The concept of art is important as well and in fact, I do believe that artistic innovation help to enhance the aesthetic appeal of a country and unleash the creative potential of people but the defence of the country is the very foundation on which the rest of the country stands. And for any dynasty or architecture to be sturdy and long lasting, it needs to be set on a strong foundation that can maintains its structure through the difficult circumstances. It is only when the foundation is strong enough that other structures or occupations can thrive and focus on becoming better to further improve the nation's appeal and economy. Therefore, without a proper military and defence, artistic development would be moot as it would never get the opportunity to flourish and have the efficacious and meaningful impact.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, really, so, therefore, well, apart from, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1895.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 383.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94778067885 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79000751974 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503916449086 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 609.3 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.069093554 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.357142857 118.986275619 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3571428571 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21428571429 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148515521363 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454905988504 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534313141452 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0917160020876 0.150359130593 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481899889681 0.0667264976115 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.