government should spend more money in support of athletics or artistic
Appropriate budget allocation is one of the most important duties and concerns of any government. There is a hot debate about the share of arts and athletics in budget allocation. Some people believe that quota of budget should be more for arts in comparison with athletics, while others intensely disagree this idea. I strongly agree with the later statement that government should spend more money in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. In what follows, I will try to elaborate on my viewpoint through two different outstanding reasons.
The first cause coming to mind to substantiate my standing point is that supporting athletics will result in a healthy community. When a government supports athletes, they will have enough money to practice well. Also, most of the talented people will be encouraged to participate in a kind of athletics to receive money. Hence, smart people besides good practice will result in winning in the Olympics. Hence, at the same time, good supports are motivating people to try to be in Olympic, it also is encouraging them to learn a sport and do a sport. Hence, with one shoot, we can get two goals. Hence, as people regularly practice and do any kind of sport, they become healthier and get sick rarely. For example, when Olympic games are held, most of the sports club statics show that young people are singing for different kinds of sport just because they are encouraged by Olympic games.
Another equally remarkable reason is that supporting athletics could increase the power of a nation. More than 800 million people watch Olympic Games, and also all the nations participate in the Olympic games. Hence, when one of your teams or members wins the first rank, most of people in the country see it. Hence, they feel proud of their country, and also people of other nations who are lost the match will see the winner as a clever person and its country as a powerful nation. For example, USA always wins the first rank in Olympic games. All people say that USA is the most powerful country that can win the first rank. Hence, winning in Olympic is an advertisement of country power and brings respect for the winner nation.
Based on the discussion, it can be concluded that supporting athletics could cause an increase in the power of a nation and healthier people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 27, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind substantiating'.
Suggestion: mind substantiating
...ng reasons. The first cause coming to mind to substantiate my standing point is that supporting at...
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Line 3, column 552, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...g them to learn a sport and do a sport. Hence, with one shoot, we can get two goals. ...
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Line 3, column 597, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
..., with one shoot, we can get two goals. Hence, as people regularly practice and do an...
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Line 5, column 273, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...r teams or members wins the first rank, most of people in the country see it. Hence, they feel...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, hence, if, so, well, while, for example, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87939698492 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57107742597 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484924623116 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.6482813623 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4761904762 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9523809524 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7619047619 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190974106959 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637511563272 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103144763171 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132498337586 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.087064575493 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.