Today more and more people are using mobile phones and computers. Thus, people are losing the ability to communicate face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Submitted by Gurikaur on Mon, 10/21/2019 - 10:14

Nowadays ,science gives us various electronic gadgets which are limelight in the world . In the anicient time people had no knowledge about the moblie phones and also computers but in these days , mostly masses depend on the technology things . They always sit on the front of computers
Regarding any work they use computer in their life . I agree with the mention statement and i will discuss both view points in forthcoming paragraphs.

To embark upon , there are various arguments that can show the view points first and the foremost is that in every field people use electronic devices for complete their work .Moreover , schools also provide computer for their students which are very beneifical for childern studies they can get more knoweldge regarding any subject throughout computer .furthermore, computers and mobile phones are very useful gadegets for relaxing and entertainment . For instance , some time people feel board in their life then they can use mobile phone for listen songs and playing video games at home .It is good way for entertainment themselves.

On ther contrary side , some people deems that it is bad habbit for human being because people always busy in these kind of thing so they do not give time to their parents and friends in their life . Apart from this, children can not play outdoor games rather than indoor games they face a lot of difficulties during health related .besides it , in many companies masses do all work on the computer they do not work manually for calucation and other things.For example , the cambridge university surveys that 75% people use mobile phone in these dasy for personal work .
To wrap up, i firmly beleive that computer and mobile phone is convenient and comfort gadgets in people 's life but masses should use in limit and should aware for these kind of appliances if these electronic gadgets are use in excess then it is very harmful in person life .

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, regarding, so, then, apart from, for example, for instance, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1597.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97507788162 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51195404436 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551401869159 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.2975951904 172% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 122.01983243 49.4020404114 247% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 177.444444444 106.682146367 166% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.6666666667 20.7667163134 172% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.4444444444 7.06120827912 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 31.0 5.01903807615 618% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169237646892 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0710024278197 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0400138178046 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0927230935255 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0383292399331 0.056905535591 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.9 13.0946893788 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.1190380762 158% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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