Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Everyone in this word want to be famous and popular in desired field, and who whould not want a short-cut to achieve there
desire and dreams. According to the prompt, young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realisitic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
I strongly agree with the prompt and would like to give following reasons for the same in the subsequent paragraphs.
Young people are those group of the population who don't have much maturity and ability to handle fame and recognition at an early age.
It is difficult for them to maintain a balance between things which credited them fame and the things which are essential to enculcate
during that tender age. For instance, many young artists say singer, dancer, nowadays youtubers focus on there skills which made them popular, this
prevent them from maintaining attention at there education and other essential criterias. Also, not all of them become successfull, only handful
of them are able to impact the corresponding industry for years. Thus, it is clear that immediate fame can be harmful and can have
adverse effect on the future of a young individual.
Recognition and fame are not only tough to habdle but they are transitory as well, its ephemeral nature makes is dangerous for the youth
who are yet to enter into the real world, the world of responsibility commitment and ability to handle pressure. So, it is always preferred to follow
a realistic goal which is always benefical in the long run.
Young people who get famous at an early age tend to be less motivated and voracious in achieving something tough in life. As things become easy going
once they are widely know, the popularity kills the desire and passion sometimes and when this temporary fame ends it become difficult for them to
work out something else for the future, many a times they lack skills and have to start from ground zero.
It is said that long-term and realisitic goals teaches patience and are advised for a better future prospects. It helps a young individual to
develop a sense of desire and since these goals are realistic, an ideal role model selection is easy and also recommended. Also, it should not be the case
that one should copy the exact same path but should try to build an independent path unique to the.
However, a reasonable person would suggest that early fame and recognition can help a young individual to gain more confidence, popularity and economic benefits
but the transient nature of the success, the naive nature of the youth population and the underdevelopment some very important life skills like desire, passion and patience
are the key factor which justifies that young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term and realistic goals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, thus, well, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2364.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 464.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09482758621 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62039808808 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508620689655 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 730.8 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.4632692138 60.3974514979 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.75 118.986275619 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 23.4991977007 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 21.0 4.97078651685 422% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 25.0 7.80617977528 320% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353293224172 0.243740707755 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120113783177 0.0831039109588 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.185699520002 0.0758088955206 245% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104719360356 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.168097666847 0.0667264976115 252% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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