Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to be meant for adults only. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. What are its causes and what solutions can be offered?
Children nowadays are experiencing illnesses that are commonly seen on adults, such as obesity. The main cause of this problem is the sedentary lifestyle that children have and the most viable solution is to include sports and exercise as part of schools' curriculum.
The primary reason of this predicament is the sedentary way of living which is commonly practised by almost all children. This is to say that they spent their free time indoors sitting infront of their screens for along period of time. They are so engrossed watching movies, browsing the Internet or playing online games. These activities do not allow them to burn fats rather it promotes weight gain more than their ideal body mass index. For instance, recent research done by the World Health Organization revealed that 65% of children who are suffering from obesity and who are unfit are those who stay indoors and engaged to sedentary recreational activities.
To tackle this problem schools should make sports and exercise as one of the subjects that children must have during the school year. This could motivate children to do such activities because they know that it is part of their curriculum. Children will also likely to teach their family members what they learn in school and as a result adults will be influenced to become physically active. For example, in Japan school children are doing 30 minutes of exercise, such as walking and dancing every morning as part of the schools' program. This initiative resulted Japan to have the highest proportion of healthy younger generation.
In conclusion, nowadays children are suffering obesity which is considered to be as an adult disease and this is due to lack of physical activities, however, this could be addressed by incorporating sports and exercise as part of the schools' program.
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Suggestion: period
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1533.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.127090301 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60990024499 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558528428094 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1863984344 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.923076923 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20174462013 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656915992574 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629154261202 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134395344855 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0562747247221 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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