The recommendation presents that the private institution Grove college should not admit men into their institution and to perserve its tradion of all-female education. To support this claims, the writer points out the result of the surveys conducted by the students government and the answers from a seperate survey. However, the evidences suggested to support the claims seems questionable. So that, the author should answers to the question to strengthen the argument.
First, it is not clear whether the survey answered by the students is more importatnt than the survey reponded by the faculty members. Because it is totally possible to think the the opinion of the faculty members are more salient because the students will leave the school after graduation anyway while the members of the faculty will stay in the school longer.
Second, it is also dubious whether the survey conducted by the students are representative for the whole opinion of the students of the institute. Because the passage does not contain any information about the entire number of students, and the number of the participants of the survey. It is possible that the result comes from the only few selected student who oppose the coeducation.
Third, the passage need to answer to the question whether the survey answered by alumnae are reliable. for example, it is entriely possible that the survey designed to elicit the lopsided answers. And it is also not guaranteed that the survey is conducted for all alumnae.
Forth, the writher does not give information whether the opinions of the students is related with the morale among students. Even though the recommendation argues that the coeducation will increase the morale of the students, it is not granted at all. The fact that the majority of the students who participated in the survey oppose the coeducation does not denote the future decrease of the morale. We can not find any relationship between two concept in the passage.
lastly, it is questionable that the the preserving the tradition of all-female education will keep supporting from alumnae. Because there are possiblity that the alumnae underwrite the finanance of the insitution regardless of the issue related with the coeducation. The change of the policy does not necessarily mean the change of the attitude of the alumnae.
In conculsion, because there are serveral questions need to be answered to bolster the claims of the recommendation, in my opinion, the college's governing commitee will not accept the idea. If the writer want to be more persuadable, the questions suggested above must be solved at least.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 425 350
No. of Characters: 2152 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.54 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.064 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.749 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 177 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 132 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.913 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.637 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.127 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 258, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... result of the surveys conducted by the students government and the answers from a seper...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 176, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...Because it is totally possible to think the the opinion of the faculty members are more...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 176, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...Because it is totally possible to think the the opinion of the faculty members are more...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 38, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
... Third, the passage need to answer to the question whether the survey answered by alumnae are reli...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 104, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...urvey answered by alumnae are reliable. for example, it is entriely possible that t...
^^^
Line 7, column 274, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he survey is conducted for all alumnae. Forth, the writher does not give informa...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 446, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'concept' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'concepts'.
Suggestion: concepts
...n not find any relationship between two concept in the passage. lastly, it is questi...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Lastly
... between two concept in the passage. lastly, it is questionable that the the preser...
^^^^^^
Line 11, column 33, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...age. lastly, it is questionable that the the preserving the tradition of all-female ...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 33, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...age. lastly, it is questionable that the the preserving the tradition of all-female ...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 125, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...tion will keep supporting from alumnae. Because there are possiblity that the alumnae u...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, first, however, if, lastly, second, so, then, third, while, at least, for example, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2217.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 425.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21647058824 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.827992551 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451764705882 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5395837713 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.571428571 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2380952381 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2380952381 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0596282720335 0.218282227539 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0180692836517 0.0743258471296 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0344869738587 0.0701772020484 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0302047658238 0.128457276422 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290073951166 0.0628817314937 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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