Some people think that art (such as painting and music) does not directly improve quality of people’s life, so the government should spend money on other areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Art has been an immensely developed field and a crucial part of society, yet the notion of the government’s expenditure on art has not been ceased. In fact, many people believe that other areas are more required, in which I disagree.
Art substantially affects one’s feelings and character. Firstly, art touches one by connecting to their emotions, renew a person, therefore, increase love and sympathy in society. For example, prisoners are treated with music and painting as a method to help them feel cherished, respected, to learn about compassion and altruism. In contrast, several nations make criminals listen to loud, intense music as a method of punishment. Art can shift a person’s feelings simply like that. With the right use of arts, the government can enhance awareness of citizens, hatred and inequality in society will no longer be an obstacle.
Secondly, art can recover and improve one’s health. Individuals are suffering from stress and anger from the rapid life pace, this directly affects their life quality. However, experiencing art can significantly reduce this tension and boredom, thus provide peace and calm. Art affects a man’s neurons, compels them to work spontaneously and produces happy hormones to the body as a result. A health survey in 2010 announced that a person with cancer can improve their health and time up to 50 years if they are always satisfied and untroubled. With that being said, art is an indispensable factor in the cure and recovery of any health problem and treatment.
To conclude, art can directly proportional to individuals’ wellbeing and the development of society, which cannot be neglected by the government. Countries and the authorities should not minimize their expenditure on this field.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in contrast, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1530.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40636042403 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06504056222 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625441696113 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.5587701423 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.625 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6875 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168657868254 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0551697805615 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0292334535185 0.0667982634062 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10359930899 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0196709133973 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.8 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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