In the future, it seems more difficult to live on Earth. Some people think more money should be spent on researching other planets, such as Mars. To what extent do you disagree or agree with this statement?
As you know, it seems more challenging to live on Earth in the future because the Earth definitely will change by a lot of effects. Some people think more money should be spent on searching for other planets to live, for example, Mars. I support that idea because I want the people in the future can have a better place to live.
There are three main reasons why I agree with them. If you always read the news or watch television, you can see they are mostly talking about how bad is the Earth’s condition right now. The first reason earth began challenging to live in human activities. We usually release a large number of plastics into the Earth’s surface. For example, if every day you use a plastic bag for shopping, so you are releasing 365 plastic bags into the environment because the plastics need a long time to decompose. When the plastic inside of the Earth’s surface in a long time, the soil will smell bad, and it is hard for us to plant a tree.
Moreover, plastics also had on the ocean and rivers, and it killed a lot of fish, turtles, and water resources, then cause water pollution. Furthermore, we also accidentally make our planet worse by burning fuels, using vehicles. Those are releasing vast amounts of carbon dioxide into the air and cause of air pollution. But we don’t have enough oxygen from the tree because of deforestation, which is the second reason Earth is starting to decrease. Deforestation can cause global warming. When the greenhouse effect increase, it increases solar radiation absorption. Then it could lead to the rise in global temperature. Global warming can cause of the sun. Some of the scientists said in fifty million years; the sun would eat the Earth because the sun keeps getting bigger by time. That is the last reason I agree we should investigate other planets.
Everyone wants to save our planet, so they start to stand together and announce to all people in the world need to use fewer plastics and no more throw litter into the environment. They change those plastics bags and cups to paper or friendly materials. On the other hand, they are volunteers go to clean the beaches and streets. Some people invented motorbikes and cars use energy, so that will release less carbon dioxide into the air. However, those activities somehow help the earth, what about the effects of natural and sun. However, we can’t change it. So some people think more money should be spent on researching other planets, such as Mars, and I agree with them. Because the water and soil on the Earth also become less and worst. Notably, the ozone layer, which protects us from dust, pollution, and UV rays, has broken. Therefore, we should find a new planet to live in the future. In 1994, NASA(The National Aeronautics and Space Administration) started to explore a new world to replace Earth, which is Mars, and they had the first flight on November 26th,2011. Mars is the only planet where we've sent rovers to roam the alien landscape. Nasa discovered Mars and Earth have different sizes, and Mars has two moons; otherwise, Earth has one. According to NASA, the atmosphere on Mars is thinly made up mostly of carbon dioxide, nitrogen, and argon gases, so Mars doesn’t offer much protection from meteorites, asteroids, and comets.
On the other hand, Mars orbits the Sun. It completes one rotation 24.6 hours, which is the same as one day on Earth(23.9 hours). Moreover, Mars and Earth are similar in the axis of rotation and seasons.
In conclusion, I agree that some people think more money should be spent on researching other planets, such as Mars. However, we still have to save the Earth as much as we can because we are still living on the Earth, and to find a new planet takes a long time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: living
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Message: Did you mean 'living'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: living
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Suggestion: many; numerous
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, still, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as, talking about, you know, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 27.0 10.4138276553 259% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 24.0651302605 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 41.998997996 174% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3112.0 1615.20841683 193% => OK
No of words: 656.0 315.596192385 208% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74390243902 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.06087906887 4.20363070211 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52727490347 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 309.0 176.041082164 176% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471036585366 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 951.3 506.74238477 188% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 5.43587174349 294% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 11.0 0.809619238477 1359% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 38.0 16.0721442886 236% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.5642545659 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.8947368421 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2631578947 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44736842105 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.67935871743 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 3.4128256513 410% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297803141541 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0749244585897 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134483423208 0.0667982634062 201% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180505795814 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127300924663 0.056905535591 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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