it is suggested that one of the most indispensable factors of being rich is providing a huge chance to give assistance to society. This essay agrees solely with the above idea. This essay will first discuss about being wealthy helps local communities reduce unemployment rate, and then talk about bringing a great deal of benefits for educational environment for children.
In some nations, especially in developing countries, the reduction of unemployment rate is widely extended thanks to great assistances from many millionaires. Wealthy people have a tendency to make huge extension of their industries or companies, but they are in a condition of laboring shortage. Therefore, abundant human resources are the top criteria to expand their brands. This has been always considered as one of the most effective factors due to the fact of high unemployment rate with high educational level. Korea is a prime example, its government has recently announced to encourage more wealthy families to make investment in some rural areas to decrease its unemployment rate since 2016.
It is also argued the importance of being rich in the education field. Despite the fact of marketing their new products, some technology industries show their interests in donating state-of-the-art devices including tablets, laptops, televisions, and so on to rural schools. Therefore, it helps reduce the burden on teachers’ shoulders and increases the educational quality. It is reported from Ninh Binh authorities in 2018 that after being assisted new technology devices from Samsung, the reading literacy of children has remarkably grown to 78% compared to 40% in 2015.
In conclusion, this essay supports the idea that wealthy communities perform a great help to the society with the assistance of providing technology devices to increase local educational environment for poor children, as well as reducing the level of unemployment situation in many cities.
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- Nowadays some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works by using the computer Do you agree or disagree 84
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: It
it is suggested that one of the most indis...
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Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put between 'has' and 'been'.
Suggestion: has always been
...p criteria to expand their brands. This has been always considered as one of the most effective...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... unemployment situation in many cities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, so, then, therefore, well, as to, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1656.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48344370861 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07430314925 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566225165563 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.6790212824 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.384615385 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2307692308 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92307692308 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155425463176 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0537464817247 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425290295519 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0916590123809 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0408682040158 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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