Nowadays, in order to survive the current economic climate, people are supposed to work from down to dust, and every one has an own daily hectic schedule. As I am witness of the situation, rarely do people contain a hobby or a tour in his time schedule. Many people believe that in the modern era people do not enjoy their life, while others are happy with this scenario. Ego, when it comes to my stance, by weighing up the pros and cons, I firmly hold that live is not enjoyable for people that past. In what follow, I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.
The first exquisite to be mentioned is that due to improvement of technology, people spend their time by their devices, like, phone, computer, television etc. After invention of the internet people tend to spend their leisure time by playing games, chatting by their virtual friends or using the social media. A study conducted in the Herat University has shown that when the tendency of using social media is caused that people feel more alone, and in some cases abusing technology had a dire consequence, and caused some nervous disorder in youngsters, while in the past people spend more time with each other, and their live was fantastic than today.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that due to complexities of live, the education system developed, some unsolved problem investigated that need to be solved, like, growth of population and confine resource of food, pollution of the air, global warming, greenhouse effect and so on. For instance, in the past people did not know about these kinds of problems, furthermore, some issues that stimulated these kinds of problems did not invented, like cars, which contaminate the air etc. Therefore, people were not attached with the mentioned problems, so they had more free time to have a fun than today.
In brief, contemplating all aforementioned reasons, people because of complexities of life and invention of new technology, have less free time to enjoy their live, to travel around the world, to spend their time by looking at beauty environment and nature which they are surrounding by.
- TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific reasons and examples to support you 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 71
- One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job. 70
- TPO 29 Integrated writing 48
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 452, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'invent'
Suggestion: invent
...mulated these kinds of problems did not invented, like cars, which contaminate the air e...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, look, so, therefore, while, for instance, in brief, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1807.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92370572207 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62977366391 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566757493188 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.2950729681 48.9658058833 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.583333333 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5833333333 20.6045352989 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41666666667 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230894831832 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0853850296211 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512435114261 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135545078114 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0208618157392 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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