Paleo diets, in which one eats how early hominids (human ancestors) did, are becoming increasingly popular. Proponents claim our bodies evolved to eat these types of food, especially bone broth, a soup made by cooking animal bones for several hours. They believe it has many health-promoting nutrients, such as cartilage, which can heal our joints, and chondroitin, which promotes nerve regeneration. Skeptics point out that ingested cartilage can’t replenish cartilage in your knees or elbows and ingested chondroitin doesn’t make our brains any healthier. Yet, there is strong anecdotal evidence that people who consume bone broth have fewer metabolic and inflammatory diseases than those who don’t. Therefore, ancient humans knew something about our physiology that we don’t, and that by emulating the way they ate, we can cure many chronic illnesse.
The passage outlines the fact that the knowledge of physiology of the human predecessors was more expanded than ours and by imitating their diets we can lead a better and healthy life.The passage arrives at the conclusion from the evidence of better physical status observed in the people following a certain food habit which originally belonged to the human ancestors.The passages's claim is flawed for numerous reasons.
First of all,the passage fails to provide justification to the fact-because a certain number of diet users have shown better immunity towards diseases doesn't necessarily mean that all the hoary diets would bring about the same outcome.There could be some food habits of ours which,in comparison to the hominids',are much more effective in maintaining a better health.Consequently,drawing a conclusion based on the consequences of merely one incident is far too ambitious.
Secondly,had the passage provided information about the physiology of the hominids and showed that there are similarities between their physiology and ours,the claim of the passage would have been more grounded.There lies a huge time difference between the hominids and us.As a result,modern human beings could have mutated to a great extent from our ancestors and our current anatomy and metabolism could,in many ways,differ from theirs.Hence,the diets that worked for their health might not do the same for us too.
Moreover,the passage points out the fact that,ingested cartilage can't promote the growth of cartilage in our knees and elbows and chondroitin doesn't cause a healthier brain either.Therefore,there could have been some other factors,not recognized by the passage,which were responsible for the better immunity of the people consuming the bone broth.For example,perhaps,those people had already possessed a better immune system and the archaic diet had nothing to with their protection against diseases.
Thus,because the passage makes many unwarranted assumptions and can't shed light on many unanswered questions,following the diets of the human ancestors won't bring about the desired success regarding the cure of illness.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 352 350
No. of Characters: 1784 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.331 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.068 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.595 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 50.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 33.83 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.43 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.43 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, hence, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, as a result, first of all, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 321.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.66043613707 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.5372319379 2.78398813304 127% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.576323987539 0.468620217663 123% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 64.0 22.8473053892 280% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 108.066646103 57.8364921388 187% => OK
Chars per sentence: 363.4 119.503703932 304% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 64.2 23.324526521 275% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 29.8 5.70786347227 522% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 32.0 5.25449101796 609% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134328230697 0.218282227539 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.075605765196 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0172818485798 0.0701772020484 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.075605765196 0.128457276422 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0172818485798 0.0628817314937 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 37.3 14.3799401198 259% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -10.41 48.3550499002 -22% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.1628742515 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 30.6 12.197005988 251% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.44 12.5979740519 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.39 8.32208582834 137% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 12.3882235529 234% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 27.6 11.1389221557 248% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 11.9071856287 260% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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