young people should go to university to further their education
‘Some people think that young people should go to university to further their education while others think they should be encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders to serve society. Discuss both views.’
It is always debatable whether young people should go to university to further their education or they should be encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders.
Undeniably, education plays a basic role in our lives. It is the most important tool that differentiates human from animal. Education is a broad term which is not confined to the specific course or book knowledge only. Schools, colleges, and universities play a crucial role in educating the young people. Institutions not only educate young people but also teach various aspects to live better life. When we interact with different people in universities, colleges, or schools our exposure increases and we contract different nature personalities.
Indubitably, education not only teach us to learn, read or write, in fact, when we are exposed to universities we groom up in a better way, we learn how to respect one another, how to talk with others and also our confidence level boosts up.
Conversely, it is not wrong to serve the society and one can do this in many different ways like car mechanics, driver, builders, or waiters. But, as the world is growing day by day in technology like medicines, vaccines, aero crafts, mechanics, and scientific research and development, young people should be encouraged to focus on their career because we can better serve the society if we are skilled enough to do so. And to be skilled person, definitely, we need to go for further higher studies in our concerned subject(s) so that perfection can be achieved in our profession.
Not everyone is perfect but somehow, perfection is required in the concerned field of interest to pursue the career in it. Everyone have consciousness to decide what is right or wrong and how to use this sense to be a responsible person to better serve the society. It is factual that in today’s society, when we pursue in our career than masters’ degree holders would be preferred over bachelors’ degree holders or phd’s would be preferred over masters.
Unequivocally, the society we are living in is full of talented and skilled persons who competes in their concerned fields with their colleagues and creates a strong healthy competitive environment. To survive in such rivalry surrounding young persons should perform their best.
Moreover, construction of hospitals, buildings, railways or roads play a pivotal role in the communities. A recent research was done by a well-known business magazine, which showed that construction of buildings in Tokyo reduced 10% traffic jams in rush hours. Not only this, Belgium universities investigated that world’s most expensive watches are made by masters who have no academic backgrounds rather than mathematical engineers. So every task requires skill set which is somehow, not linked with academics.
To sum up, young persons should be encouraged to further their studies in universities but it is also not wrong saying:
‘there is no short-cut of experience.’
So in my opinion, there should be a balance as in our society as both white and blue-collar workers have their importance which cannot be denied and inevitably crucial for the prosperity of our society.
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| 2024-11-16 | Trần Ánh Vy | 73 | view |
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- in many countries a small number of people earn extremely high salaries some people believe that this is good for the country but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level 73
- bringing in foreign workers to fill positions that domestic workers are unwilling to do can cause problems 73
- power of advertisement reflects the sale of consumer goods 61
- young people should go to university to further their education 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 73, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...erve the society and one can do this in many different ways like car mechanics, driver, builde...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, if, moreover, so, well, while, in fact, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 13.1623246493 228% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 10.4138276553 240% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 45.0 24.0651302605 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 41.998997996 167% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2842.0 1615.20841683 176% => OK
No of words: 549.0 315.596192385 174% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1766848816 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84053189512 4.20363070211 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95280241017 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 176.041082164 154% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493624772313 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 871.2 506.74238477 172% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.5935902707 49.4020404114 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.181818182 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9545454545 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.95454545455 7.06120827912 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 11.0 4.38176352705 251% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376031660685 0.244688304435 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110592569716 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150025065703 0.0667982634062 225% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186200417902 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.188484131764 0.056905535591 331% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 78.4519038076 171% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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