It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
History is an indispensable subject in most schools and it is compulsory at many lever education. Some people believe that children should be taught the history of the place where they live than global history. From my point of view, I disagree with this belief.
On the one hand, it is undeniable that thorough insights into local history will help children gain more knowledge of their origin and promote a sense of patriotism. For instant, to regain independence, Vietnam had suffered from numerous losses especially Great Hunger in 1945 with more than 2 millions people died. Millions heroes sacrificed their life to protect homeland and defeat enemies. Therefore, the young children would take pride and treasure the life they know as it is today. Additionally, when they know about history, where they live, they will understand their hometown’s traditional values and identity.
Furthermore, as the world has become globalization, understanding history of foreign country would be able to integrate into international environment.
I am strongly convinced that the learning of local history is placed paralled with world history would be the most effective way for the children. They would understand historical events more deeply and thoroughly. For example, Vietnam defeated Japanese troop and reached the victory in Indochina war in 1945 after a series of relevant events in the World War II happened, one of which is the surrender of Japan to the Allies. This way of learning, learner would have an comprehensive and objective of historical data and facts or lesson.
In conclusion, I believe that learning about world history share equal importance just as local one because they have distinctively meanings to children. Therefore, acknowledgment of both domestic and international would equip young learner a well-rounded perspective of life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 468, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...his way of learning, learner would have an comprehensive and objective of historic...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1575.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41237113402 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97637751514 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580756013746 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5903108307 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26666666667 7.06120827912 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242407322883 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759281488166 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0786252992875 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136073939921 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0311048544807 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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