Why are some people who leave school early more successful compared with those who complete their studies. Provide reasons why they are more successful and what are the requirements for success?
It is important to consider why a few people who drop out of school early tend to do well in life. In this essay I will try to explain some reasons why such people are successful followed by the requirements that help them achieve this success.
Firstly, the students who choose to exits school early have a head start on work experience. That is, the earlier the start working in life, the higher the experience they gain in comparison to their peers who continue to spend time studying at school with no experience. For example, a person who starts working at 15 years of age will have an 8 year head-start in work practice over a person who pursues a masters degree. Furthermore an individual that spends higher hours working gains the confidence needed to out-perform his peers who are starting afresh in their careers.
To achieve such success one should be willing to work hard. That is to be able to stand out from the herd, one should be able to go above and beyond their limits by spending higher hours on their jobs. Furthermore, every man / woman who desires to achieve more must be willing to take risks. This is because nobody will be able to take decisions out of their comfort zones if they play it safe. For example, a study conducted by the TIME magazine showed that 94% of the top 100 CEO's spent more than 16 hours of the day working in addition to being more inclined to taking heavy risks.
To summarize, those who drop out early from school succeed because of their early start in acquiring work experience. And such success can only be achieved through hard work and taking risks.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 37, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'exit'.
Suggestion: exit
... Firstly, the students who choose to exits school early have a head start on work ...
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Line 3, column 103, Rule ID: THE_EXACTLY_THE[1]
Message: Duplicated 'the' in the phrase: 'the earlier the'. Did you mean 'earlier the'?
Suggestion: earlier the
...head start on work experience. That is, the earlier the start working in life, the higher the e...
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Line 3, column 425, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
... a person who pursues a masters degree. Furthermore an individual that spends higher hours ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, well, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1323.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59375 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37188587467 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545138888889 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 395.1 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9051342043 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.769230769 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1538461538 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15384615385 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299496773918 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111264579606 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611279308657 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197773674145 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.080583452858 0.056905535591 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 12.4159519038 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 78.4519038076 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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