We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is sometimes argued that we should care about people who need help in our own communities and countries because we are not able to offer supports to everyone. In my opinion, we need to help people whether they are in local areas or the other side of the world even though we have limitations of doing things.
We should give our hands to people who need help in local communities. It is easier and more effective to help local people because we are close to each other and understand what their needs are. For instance, when the bush fire put some Australia people into dangers last year, other Australians delivery food, water and clothes to the people who lost home in a short period of time. By contrast, it would take more days to receive assistance from other countries and the costs would be higher due to long-distance transportation. In this case, offering help to and receiving assistance from local communities are much better.
On the other hand, it would be wrong that people should only care about their small areas and sometimes crimes that happened in other places can impact the entire world. First of all, there are still various ways to support people in the other corner of the Earth. For example, people can donate money to some international organizations like Red Across and even do some voluntary jobs in under-developed countries, so that they can help people who live far away. Secondly, countries become more connected than ever due to globalization, which means some local issues turn to international. Take Mid East as an example, if no one offers help when they have trouble, a riot there may affect the oil industry, then the impact would spread globally.
In conclusion, we need to care about and contribute to local communities but should not ignore the people who need help in other areas.
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- At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages? 78
- TPO 52 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 370, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... to the people who lost home in a short period of time. By contrast, it would take more days t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1521.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81329113924 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60727807771 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544303797468 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.951150289 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3076923077 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0769230769 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254780718144 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111488620865 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0931373471944 0.0667982634062 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200027366639 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0834629901444 0.056905535591 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.