Summarise the points made in the lecture, being sure t explain why they cast doubts on specific points made in the reading passage.
According to the reading passage, three arguments were mentioned to show that Robert Peary reached the North Pole in 1909, while in the listening section, lecturer stated some competing theories to contradict passage's arguments.
In the reading passage, author pointed out three evidence, which support the truth of Peary's claim. First, the committee in the National Geographic Society concluded that Peary's accounts were consistent and persuasive, and declared that he indeed reached the North Pole. Second, Tom Avery recently made the trek, same to Peary's trek, in less than 37 days, which showed that Peary's claim was possible. Finally, photographs that Peary took himself support his claim to have reached the North Pole.
However, in the listening section, lecturer argued that evidence in the passage were not convincing, and he stated some controversial theories. First, committee was not objective, because committee's members were Peary's friends and they have taken money from Peary, so conclusions were based on biased ideas. Second, Avery journey was so different from Peary's journey, because Avery used airplane for his journey in some regions, so his journey took much less than Peary's trek. Besides, Peary's exploration was in unfavorable weather than Avery's journey. Finally, photographs taken by Peary, does not indicate anything, because photographs did not establish Sun's exact position, also photos faded overtime, so those photos does not approve that Peary reached North Pole.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...s exploration was in unfavorable weather than Averys journey. Finally, photograph...
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...han Averys journey. Finally, photographs taken by Peary, does not indicate anythi...
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... approve that Peary reached North Pole.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, first, however, if, second, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 30.3222958057 66% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1269.0 1373.03311258 92% => OK
No of words: 229.0 270.72406181 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54148471616 5.08290768461 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89008302616 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48235511495 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 145.348785872 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558951965066 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 381.6 419.366225166 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9754103682 49.2860985944 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.9 110.228320801 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9 21.698381199 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1 7.06452816374 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0668782737004 0.272083759551 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0319411876344 0.0996497079465 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0377178304672 0.0662205650399 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0544887567191 0.162205337803 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0208136824291 0.0443174109184 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.3589403974 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 53.8541721854 76% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.0289183223 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 12.2367328918 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.42419426049 112% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.7273730684 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
Read sample essays from ETS:
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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