Nowadays, experience is more valued in the workplace than knowledge in many countries. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
These days, most employees prefer job applicants who have more working experience in a relevant position. While I accept that this method has advantages for both employees and employers, I would argue that knowledge of employers also should be given high importance.
On the one hand, having experience in a job is very important. It enables workers to decide wise decisions in the working environment and perform their tasks wisely that can guarantee a business to be flourish. Another advantage of putting high emphasis on working experience in the labor market could encourage young people to achieve essential working skills and abilities that make them more employable. Unfortunately, these days students only focus on their ability to grasp voluminous syllabus and their academic grades so they lack various working skills that are needed in today’s competitive labor market. Moreover, this issue could motivate several young people to embark on their future careers as soon as possible to aquire profound ability and experience in their jobs.
On the other hand, academic education is needed for various professions, such as doctors, engineers, teachers, lawyers, and so on. Studying in universities is very time-consuming and students must spend several years in universities and deal with a variety of difficult courses to graduate, so several students do not get the time to work beside their studies. If different businesses only recruit job applicants who have working experience, they never get a chance to put into practice what they have learned during their studies, which makes them reluctant to study and increases university dropout.
In conclusion, knowledge and experience are both necessary to perform well in a job. I believe that different businesses also should provide and working opportunities for newly graduated students to become experienced in their jobs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, well, while, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1606.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46258503401 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85557942323 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58843537415 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1308656892 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.833333333 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0893819259458 0.244688304435 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0399696095602 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389516786382 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0639811652006 0.151304729494 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385400903639 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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