In this day and age, how people live when they become older and older has drawn a lot of attention from the public. It is said that some older inhabitants prefer living in retirement communities with people at the same age to living with their children. While I accept that this trend may have some benefits, I strongly believe that its drawbacks are greater.
To commence with, one of the benefits of this trend is that the elder will be looked after more carefully in these retirement communities. To be more specific, in some good retirements communities, there are many nurses who are responsible to take care of the elder with things such as: help them to eat, to laugh or even to take a shower. Hence, older people will be healthier. Moreover, living in such communities means that the elder can make friends with people at the same age with them. Therefore, they can easily share the feelings which can not be shared with their relatives. Last but not least, a family with too many generations can face many problems cause by generation differences in thoughts and actions.
On the flip of the coin, this trend could have its disadvantages as well. First, the older people are, the more love they want to share and earn. For instance, they are likely to see and to talk with their children whenever they can. Second, families with more than three generations is different from those with two generations. For example, the elder has experience which can only be learnt after ages, these are such good things to teach children. Third, in some certain countries, their traditions encourage adult children to take after their parents in their own, not by sending them to retirement communities. It is proved that in some Asia countries, the trend of building retirement communities is not popular.
All in all, while there are some benefits of the trend to send the elder to retirement communties, I still agree that its drawbacks outweight. Children should find out the best way to take care of their parents, no matter how old they are.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 404, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'communities'' or 'community's'?
Suggestion: communities'; community's
... be healthier. Moreover, living in such communities means that the elder can make friends w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, look, may, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, third, well, while, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1691.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 354.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77683615819 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53706445177 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505649717514 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 519.3 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2427089304 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.9444444444 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359486457251 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119806614847 0.084324248473 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114322608876 0.0667982634062 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23315447115 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110012745104 0.056905535591 193% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.58950901804 82% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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