Nowadays everyone has their own inspiration. Relatively, many youngster has celebrities as their idol person as the rate of famous person is increased. This essay will elaborate the positive as well as negative impact in the development of children.
In the beginning, many celebrities are the ideal person of younger people, this leads to the positive development of children . Ultimately, artist has a high standard of living so many people intended to live the life which their idol people are living. Superstar will be involved in different social activities by seeing that youngster will be motivated and they will start to help the needy people which helps to develop the country as well as their own character. For instance, i am inspired by the work done by miss Nepal Shrinkhala Khatiwada because she is the only person who helps for poor people as well as she is kind hearted. Hence , having a famous person as a role model helps to develop the character of younger people.
Secondly, people follow their ideal person in social media and they do watch each and every movie, videos of them in which they are involved in illegal activities by seeing this they may be involve in the criminal things in real life. Although, drinks is small thing for superstar but younger people will also start to drink in small age which may lead many health problem. For e.g, if any artist is involved in crime in their movie then young people does not think that its only movie because they do not know what is right and what is wrong so they may also follow the path of their role model. Thus, many human has involved in the criminal activities after following the film played by their own role model.
To conclude, i personally believe that having a celebrities as role model with leads advantage in younger people because they may be motivate in their life and star to struggle for achieving their future goal.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1585.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78851963746 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42699128204 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477341389728 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.3387892273 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.923076923 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4615384615 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267184468638 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108845558957 0.084324248473 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06242644742 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176776072132 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0325613959693 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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