Many countries aim to improve their living standard by economic development, but some important social values are lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages?
It is true that many nations focus on economic growth to advance citizen’s quality of life. However some people believe that this financial improvement has negatively impacted on the traditional values of society. From my point of view, although I agree with this view to some extent, I maintain that the benefits of prosperous economy can overcome its drawbacks.
To begin with, the disadvantage of economic advancement is the loss of socials value. In fact, competition and passion to earn more money make people spend most of the time working which lead to isolation of social interaction. Thus, parents would have little opportunity to take care of their children so the value of a close knit family is neglected. As a result, the lack of affection urges them to fall into the traps of society, tends to violence and eventually involve in antisocial activities.
On the other hand, stable growing economy brings positive impacts on fulfill the desires of inhabitants such as expanding the job market and improve the quality of facilities. First of all, the financial development brings better job opportunities for workers and employees. This is due to the expansion of business markets and trade increase the demand for labor sources of enterprises. Furthermore, with the strong finance, the governments can invest more money to upgrade the facilities. For instance, thanks to economic growth, Vietnamese government in cooperation with foreign investors has developed an elevated railway system to facilitate citizen’s travel, along with schools for youngsters in remote areas.
In conclusion, every country needs to toward financial advancement on account of its considerable advantages for social community. It is advisable that the governments should not be so concerned about boosting the economy that it ignores the preservation of the beauty in social culture.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, first of all, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37627118644 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95103388268 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630508474576 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0776515141 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.285714286 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0714285714 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5 7.06120827912 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175715141302 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539680531836 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0441482428029 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0947285559099 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0198899718824 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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