Q1: Some people think that the best way to reduce time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city centre with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Recently, the issue of converting green spaces into residential areas has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that substituting residential buildings in order to reduce time devoted to travelling to and from work for eco-friendly facilities, such as gardens and parks, close to the central area of the city should be encouraged, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that people should not remove environment-friendly amenities near the city centre so as to build housing estates do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that having gardens and parks makes it possible for working adults to take a rest that help them to unwind during their lunchtime with greater ease. To provide a hypothetical example, if it were not for green places for working people, they would have difficulty alleviate the level of stress, exerting a detrimental influence on their work performance.
My opinion, however, is that it is an effective way of combating a high volume of traffic to supersede parks and gardens close to the city business district by a large number of skyscrapers accommodating numerous citizens. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that if a multitude of employees residing close to their workplaces travel to work by foot or bike, other dwellers in suburban areas would be less likely to suffer from traffic congestion. This is partly because the number of personal vehicles on roads would remarkably decrease, which can contribute to a rise in the quality of citizens' lives. Moreover, depriving commuters of less time dedicated to travelling to work enables them to focus more on their occupations. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that destroying green areas close to the CBD and erecting a myriad of apartment blocks are necessary for the reasons discussed above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, well, while, as to, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16806722689 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93321852581 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607843137255 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.6655098486 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.785714286 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307033870174 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828606145847 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643797172674 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163208986193 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521343447758 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.