Some people think that sports involving violence such as boxing and martial arts should be banned from TV and international sporting competitions. What extent do you agree or disagree
This is a fact that sports are extremely significant to keep us as fit as fiddle. Some people argue that some extreme sports promote violence such as boxing as well as suggested that these supports are supposed to be strictly prohibited from television and international sporting competitions. While I believe that sports containing a certain degree of risk should be banned, some potential benefits can be provided by the games such as boxing and martial arts.
On the one hand, some dangerous sports bring a high level of violence, should not be telecasted on TV channels. I am going to demonstrate some prominent reasons for this phenomenon. First of all, In today’s contemporary era, children follow their role models to grow like them as celebrities and sport-stars work as role models for the public and the fundamental duty is to develop sportsmanship instead of behaving badly and violently. To explain more, they know that they have a big social responsibility and millions of young ones follow their lifestyles. Therefore, if they would create violence during sports competitions then it will be a negative impact on the behaviour of youngsters. Secondly, competing with each other for money or victory can cause bad behaviour or break up relationships among players. Furthermore, children are vulnerable and come under the effect easily so they may promote violence in society. Secondly, Martial arts also contributes at large to violence as if not properly taught then might put negative impact. Finally, adults are compelled to follow their role models as they wish to become like them.
Moving further, violation and fighting lead to juvenile delinquency among young ones as if they will watch TV sports that comprise physical injuries and forceful behaviour then they would indulge in illegal activities such as murders, thefts and money Laundering etcetera. As a consequence, other youngsters living around in society will be encouraged to commit crimes
On the other hand, along with adverse effects dangerous sports and martial arts can prove beneficial for the community. First of all, in today’s fast-paced world everyone wants to be energetic as people have a hectic schedule which makes them exhausted every day. Hence, people need some energy and activeness in their daily lives. Also, martial arts are depicted as a sign of self-confidence, motivation and courage. Besides, learning self-discipline and self-defence is a practice of martial arts as this is a kind of physical exercise that keeps the body not only healthy physically but also mentally. Apart from this, for working as a team, martial arts are considered as a best practice as to whether it is done as an individual activity but when someone joins a club to learn martial arts then it creates a sense of. Belongingness and lifelong relations. On top of it, learning new skills increases the confidence of children as when they present their skills in front of others then get praised which makes them delight.
To conclude, although martial arts and games like boxing are regarded as a violating exercise yet I believe that the trend is a positive development in society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
... a team, martial arts are considered as a best practice as to whether it is done ...
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Line 6, column 693, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
... arts are considered as a best practice as to whether it is done as an individual activity bu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, apart from, as to, kind of, such as, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 10.4138276553 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2664.0 1615.20841683 165% => OK
No of words: 515.0 315.596192385 163% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17281553398 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87514006429 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 176.041082164 158% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541747572816 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 828.9 506.74238477 164% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0070643803 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.090909091 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4090909091 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.95454545455 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287946890265 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0793939475173 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0815370346056 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160387860137 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103952486766 0.056905535591 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 78.4519038076 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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