The government should lower the budget on the arts in order to allocate more money to education.
To what extent do you agree?
It has been argued that the money dedicated to the arts should be decreased by the authority to spend more money on education. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I will elaborate on why I strongly agree with this statement.
Firstly, by devoting money to education, the governments might encourage deprived people to increase their academic knowledge. Nowadays, the request for admitting to state universities is soaring, and their capacity is limited. Therefore, a large number of students pour into private ones. However, because of the very staggering tuition fee of these colleges, many eager students cannot afford it and deprive of further education. If this money is spent on students’ scholarships or building more state graduate schools, more children are able to register in these free universities.
In addition, the online educational infrastructure will be fortified if this money uses appropriately. Plenty of students, especially those living in remote areas in third-world countries, do not have convenient access to schools or teachers, leading to an increase in the rate of illiterate individuals. Allocating this money to construct an appropriate infrastructure to increase internet access will facilitate their education. It can bring the teachers and books to their smart devices, and they have a partially equal opportunity to learn.
Although some people consider the arts as entertainment and believe they would be crucial for developing children’s mind, the high budget spent on them is not reasonable.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that if more money is devoted to education, more students and children will get benefit from it.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 154, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'admitting stating'.
Suggestion: admitting stating
...ic knowledge. Nowadays, the request for admitting to state universities is soaring, and their capa...
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Line 3, column 240, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...d their capacity is limited. Therefore, a large number of students pour into private ones. Howeve...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, so, therefore, third, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1421.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.59448818898 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15163566511 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602362204724 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5111038738 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.307692308 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5384615385 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46153846154 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200540374374 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654877806838 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632881499645 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129815858039 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051571614949 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.14 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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