The graph below gives the results of a survey showing what 1000 young people did after leaving school between 2008 and 2012

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The graph below gives the results of a survey showing what 1000 young people did after leaving school between 2008 and 2012

Submitted by raghibah on Sat, 08/21/2021 - 03:41

The bar chart demonstrates the survey report of 1000 youngsters activities after graduating from school in 2008-2012.

Overall, the majority of graduates were initially in search of job, but it showed some changes throughout the period, having similar trend to those enrolling University. Also, youngsters taking a gap year decreased.

In 2008, the number of people graduated from school and looked for work was 500 people, and the one of those continued to take a temporary break from education and study at University accounted 200 and 300 graduates respectively. By 2012, the former figure had a plummet to around 370, while the latter one had presented the reverse, a rise of approximately 100 people, and the rest group had stagnated to the initial number, 300 people.

There was a significant downwards to 400 in the number of young people getting into workforce in 2009 before it dropped again and levelled off to just above 300 between 2010 and 2011. However, a contradictive trend was seen in the one of those wanting to give themselves a gap year, increasing gradually from 250 to 300 people in that period. The number of graduates enrolling University immidiately accounted for upwards by 50 people, but then dropped to just below 400.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 164, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ake a temporary break from education and study at University accounted 200 and 30...
^^
Line 7, column 25, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'downward'?
Suggestion: downward
... 300 people. There was a significant downwards to 400 in the number of young people ge...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 33.7804878049 121% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1051.0 965.302439024 109% => OK
No of words: 207.0 196.424390244 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07729468599 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79308509922 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80783984941 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 106.607317073 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6038647343 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 308.7 283.868780488 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.482926829268 828% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3022501836 43.030603864 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.375 112.824112599 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.875 22.9334400587 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.625 5.23603664747 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158955987334 0.215688989381 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678611071007 0.103423049105 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714225302732 0.0843802449381 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107225568997 0.15604864568 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0830193594066 0.0819641961636 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.2329268293 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 40.7170731707 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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