Both Views
A certain number of people assume people turn to be more independent in today's modern world. Although others think that people would rely on other people to live since there is a shortage of natural resources, I believe the emerging technology is more likely to help us solve our own problems.
The shortage of natural resources in today's era would likely make people become dependent on other people in terms of food. This is because not all people can access the land to grow their own food. For instance, a study conducted by the government of Jakarta stated that nearly 90% of fresh food supplies in Jakarta were sent from the West Java rural area due to the scarcity of fertile soil available in Jakarta. This condition makes Jakartans unable to grow plantations.
On the other hand, emerging technologies help people to become less reliant on other people in terms of solving problems. This is because technologies provide the information we need without having to ask other people for help. This can be seen on the Google Maps technology that enables drivers to find direction on the road when being lost in a place they have never been to. Thus, they only need to use their phone without having to ask anyone about the direction.
In short, even though some people might still rely on other people in terms of natural resources available, the presence of technologies makes people become more independent in today's era. Both notions are much likely dependent on the context.
- The bar graph below shows the stock price of four different technology companies from 2011 to 2016 61
- The line chart conveys the proportion of viewers watching Channer one news several times counted in millions 73
- The graph below shows average carbon dioxide CO2 emissions per person in the United Kingdom Sweden Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007 73
- Many students are now refusing to choose science subjects at their university level Why do you think this is happening and what is the impact on the community 78
- The graph below shows the consumption of three spreads from 1989 to 2007 73
Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, still, thus, for instance, in short, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 10.4138276553 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1240.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88188976378 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4433566952 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551181102362 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 391.5 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5362308846 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.333333333 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0179596719801 0.244688304435 7% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0146488398661 0.084324248473 17% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485847054499 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0175551023985 0.151304729494 12% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0304063292863 0.056905535591 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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