people in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with illegal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a poor sample. discusses the causes and some of the effects of the widespread use of drugs by young people in modern society.
The phenomenon of drugs abuse is not news for today's society, people from all age groups were once experienced it, but not the young. Yet there are concerns by some sociologists about the effects on our future generations if the adults keep showing a bad example about this issue.
In my opinion, the unacceptable behavior of abusing drugs is caused by hanging in the wrong crowd, no matter how old we are, keeping the wrong toxic people around will significantly influence the way we behave. And the most vulnerable groups are teenagers to young adults. Another motivation behind this act is a domestic problem that subconsciously controls the mind of young people to think that everything that happened was their fault. Therefore they do self-sabotage thinking that they deserve nothing, and often turn into the one thing that can help them release the pain inside. Narcotics.
Where do narcotics come from originally? Narcotics is an addictive substance that causes organ damage if it is overly used, very hard to control. In Indonesia, the spread is uncontrollable considering that Indonesia is such a big market for these products, the demand was high not to mention the way that it was obtained is another challenge for some parties that have been taking advantage of the situation by smuggling it from outside country. And Indonesia is not a small country, it is one of the biggest maritime countries that had a lot of unsupervised borders that are difficult for our current defense system covering every inch of it. That is why the government should pay more attention to this issue by strengthening the borders and doing a constant campaign about the negative impact of drug abuse. Because it always is better to prevent than cure e.g rehabilitation process.
In conclusion, I think that all stakeholders need to find a better way of stopping this awful situation through focused public education or creating a policy that can prevent the widespread of illegal substances.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 282, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...showing a bad example about this issue. In my opinion, the unacceptable behavior...
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Line 3, column 441, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...erything that happened was their fault. Therefore they do self-sabotage thinking that the...
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Line 5, column 812, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...bout the negative impact of drug abuse. Because it always is better to prevent than cur...
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Line 5, column 823, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'is'.
Suggestion: is always
...gative impact of drug abuse. Because it always is better to prevent than cure e.g rehabil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, then, therefore, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1662.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05167173252 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82031493432 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632218844985 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.1102482535 49.4020404114 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.846153846 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3076923077 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15384615385 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113902572416 0.244688304435 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0339101272206 0.084324248473 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0373442295214 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0697399243433 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328592039843 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.