Some people believe that it is a good idea that older people continue to work if it is possible for them to do. Do you agree or disagree?
There have been an increasing debates as to whether or not older people should be allowed to work as long as they can. Some individuals maintain that it is beneficial to let the elderly work beyond the retirement age. I concur with this perception because if people can work longer, they will contribute more to the economy. Additionally, working helps prevent the occurrence of some senile diseases, namely alzheimer’s, dementia, etc.
On the other hand, working does wonders for one’s brain. There is often a decline in the cognitive abilities of older adults because people tend to relax their brain after retirement. In contrast, work provides many opportunities for learning, reasoning, socializing,etc all of which help stave off the adverse effects aging can have on the brain. For example, many university professors still work in their 70s because they believe that only by working do their brains remain sharp.
On the one hand, by working longer, individuals helps grow the economy. This is because when people have a job, they can earn salaries which are often times much higher than their pension. With a decent amount of earnings, people are willing to spend more on goods and services, which promotes production. To illustrate, my dad used to live economically on his pension of around 120 dollars a month. However, now that he has a job, he starts to buy himself new clothes and shoes.
In conclusion, I am in harmony with some people suggesting that the elderly should be given the permission to work longer. This development does not only aid seniors in maintaining good mental health, but it is also advantageous to economic system of a nation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 39, Rule ID: WHETHER[4]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; whether or not; as to whether
There have been an increasing debates as to whether or not older people should be allowed to work...
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Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...as to whether or not older people should be allowed to work as long as they can. ...
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Line 1, column 437, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ases, namely alzheimer’s, dementia, etc. On the other hand, working does wonders ...
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Line 2, column 267, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , etc
...ies for learning, reasoning, socializing,etc all of which help stave off the adverse...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, as to, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1397.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02517985612 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75952739796 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611510791367 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.2741106203 49.4020404114 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.1333333333 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5333333333 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237520170934 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754105815814 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461009140093 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139234163188 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396254304329 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.