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The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.

"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

While it may be true that Climpson Industries can prevent employees from wasting time, foster work ethic, and improve overall profits, the vice president of human resources’ argument does not make a cogent case for installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers. It is easy to understand why the Company needs to implement electronic monitoring of employees’ Internet use from their workstations, but this argument is rife with holes and assumptions, and thus, not strong enough to lead to install the software.

Citing the effort to improve their employees' productivity, the vice president of human resources stated that they should implement monitoring to identify and punish the culprit and will reduce the wasting hour by curbing internet use. He may think that the employee will not use their gadgets like laptops, tablets, or mobile phones to use the internet during their working hours. It may be true that the employee will play offline games from the same workstation without leaving any proof of their action that is completely impossible to detect by the software. In any of the cases, the company will not be able to curb the wasting time by employees and bolster productivity.

Additionally, the author implies that software monitoring is likely to foster a better work ethic as monitoring can find and punish internet users. But, this is likely to backfire. When the employee will know that they are being monitored constantly through their workstation, they will act to be innocent in their module and indulge in the pleasure at best. They will try to use anti-spying software in their system, gossip with colleagues, talk over the phone, shop, and play games with their gadgets. For example, the employees who remain under CCTV surveillance do not behave properly when they are not under monitoring. The employees of Climpson Industries can also behave in an unethical manner when they think that they are not going to be caught by software monitoring. If any of these scenarios come out to be true, the dream of fostering a better work ethic will be unfulfilled.

Finally, the author assumes that by using spyware the company will be able to improve overall profits. But, it can be true that the company will face employee resentment for spying on them. The employee will feel threatened by constant monitoring and will lose the trust of the employer. They may work slowly and sporadically to show the company that they are not wasting time rather they will end up doing less work than they normally do. They can decrease efficiency level which will further decline productivity thus the overall profits will not improve. Employee productivity, efficiency, and working environment are the parameters to improve the overall profits of any organization. But, this is not going to be happened through installing software to monitor employees’ Internet use.

Improved employees productivity has a tremendous effect on the industry to sustain and grow in this competitive market. To have maximum exploitation of the opportunity it is necessary to reduce wasting time, enhance work ethic. For these reasons, the president of Climpson Industries may decide to use Electronic monitoring of Internet use from the workstations by employees. However, the argument of the vice president of human resources is not likely to persuade the authority to Install software to detect employees who use the Internet on company computers.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 265, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Internet) must be used with a third-person verb: 'uses'.
Suggestion: uses
...g software to detect employees Internet use on company computers. It is easy to und...
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Line 3, column 678, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... by employees and bolster productivity. Additionally, the author implies that so...
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Line 5, column 679, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an unethical manner" with adverb for "unethical"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... of Climpson Industries can also behave in an unethical manner when they think that they are not going...
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Line 5, column 890, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... better work ethic will be unfulfilled. Finally, the author assumes that by usin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, so, thus, while, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 12.9520958084 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 28.8173652695 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2918.0 2260.96107784 129% => OK
No of words: 561.0 441.139720559 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20142602496 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86676880123 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79553634661 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 204.123752495 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.429590017825 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 900.0 705.55239521 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9268294845 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.583333333 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.375 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.75 5.70786347227 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348394806713 0.218282227539 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11618499016 0.0743258471296 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0978410432226 0.0701772020484 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256475596934 0.128457276422 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105368677598 0.0628817314937 168% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 98.500998004 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, so, thus, while, for example

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