Some people say that family has the most powerful influence on a child’s development; however, others say that influences such as music, other people, ... have the greatest influence on children.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
Although some people argue that children’s development is influenced powerfully by their family the most, others believe that outside factors such as music, other people, … make the greatest influence on children. In my opinion, family impacts on how children develop more than other factors.
There are several reasons why influences, which do not belong to family, affect kids. First, children spend a lot of time at school, therefore, they can learn from their teachers and friends on many aspects to build up their personality. For example, when a kid starts studying in kindergarten, he can learn how to get on well with other kids and gradually knows the way to behave well with others. Second, children access to the Internet rather early thesedays and they are attracted by popular trends on the the social media. These can be books, music or games which easily impact on human’s thinking, and children arenot exception, even they will change completely into a new version if they are affected too much.
On the other hand, family has two powerful influences on a kid. Children usually form their personality between two and five years old and during this period, they interact with their family members the most. Therefore, kids will take after the lifestyle and characters of members in family. For instance, children, who have aggressive parents, tent to be violent and impatient. Moreover, family also impacts on the way children face difficulties, because they always ask their family members for advice when they have to make important decisions. Gradually, they will have same mindset to members whom they consult most.
In conclusion, whereas there are some impacts from factors which donot belong to family on children, on my point is that family has the most significant influence on development of a kid.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 506, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...they are attracted by popular trends on the the social media. These can be books, music...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 506, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...they are attracted by popular trends on the the social media. These can be books, music...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, whereas, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1536.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13712374582 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58200478196 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602006688963 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.44513554 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.714285714 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3571428571 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5714285714 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252892650818 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0990338899067 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115842632196 0.0667982634062 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197351556011 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.134520577306 0.056905535591 236% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 506, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...they are attracted by popular trends on the the social media. These can be books, music...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 506, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...they are attracted by popular trends on the the social media. These can be books, music...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, whereas, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1536.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13712374582 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58200478196 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602006688963 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.44513554 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.714285714 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3571428571 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5714285714 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252892650818 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0990338899067 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115842632196 0.0667982634062 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197351556011 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.134520577306 0.056905535591 236% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.