Some people believe famous people's support towards international aid organizations draws the attention to problems, while others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both views and give your opinions.
Recently, the impact of celebrities' assistance on ordinary people has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that influencers can contribute to an increase in individuals' attention to social issues by supporting global charities, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that public figures assisting socially disadvantaged people have a negative influence on individuals do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that some entertainers tend to exploit charitable activities, causing the masses to become less interested in social problems. As an illustration, a Korean singer-songwriter named Kim Hun patronised an international charitable foundation in 2015, which made it possible for him to obtain fame and wealth. However, according to an article released by the Seoul Times, it turned out that the main purpose of his donation was receiving tax waivers. Given these points, some people hold the view that celebrities can worsen the essence of aid.
My opinion, however, is that renowned figures helping international charitable institutions exert a positive impact on the general public. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that not only can they inform the importance of the value of charitable activities of the masses, but they are also capable of raising awareness amongst the public given that they are often exposed to mass media. In addition, a multitude of fans of celebrities have a predisposition to participate in charitable work when their idols partake in it. To exemplify, Lionel Messi spent approximately 3 million US dollars on a global charitable foundation in South Africa in order to combat global hunger in the year 2020, leading a myriad of his keen supporters across the globe to pay attention to poverty. As a result, they donated around 5 million US dollars. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that well-known people's aid toward global charitable institutions positively affects society for the reasons discussed above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 124, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...itutions exert a positive impact on the general public. Perhaps the most compelling reason is ...
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Line 7, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that well-kno...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2000.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 372.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37634408602 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06557235146 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 176.041082164 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623655913978 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.7504396441 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.647058824 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8823529412 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.70588235294 7.06120827912 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20416434592 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057946812297 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602321629069 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130082414419 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591521141195 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.86 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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