The availability of entertainment such as video games on handheld devices is harmful to individuals and to the society they live in To what extent do you agree and disagree

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The availability of entertainment such as video games on handheld devices is harmful to individuals and to the society they live in. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

It is agrued that the availability of entertainment such as video games is demerits to citizens and to the society. From my point of view, in some situation i mostly agree with this notion because of its benefit for the population life. The following essay will analyse this statement in detail.
First of all, in the international world and with the appearence of modern technology that the numerber of adolesence addicted to internet have been increased graduatlly. so handheld devices are hugely dangerous for the teenagers. Not only can children not concentrate in other neccessary fields such as education, but also their creative and imagination skills will be reduced by this problem which lead disadvantage affection to the economic development of their nation. Furthermore, the young generations protential will be afftected dramatically, lacking their academic knowledge, social experience and valuable information. To illustrate, there was a vurvey by Antony Rodigo, the famous scientist and professor which was about the success of teenagers in New York who get addicted to online games. The statistic showed that nearly everyone has made numerous mistake and trouble in their career.
However, we can not negate the importance of modern innovation for the society. With the appropriate method of parent that postgraduate can use handheld devices for relaxation after their hard-working time at the university. Moreover, social-evil can be avoided for the children such as drugs, necotein or other types of addicted, strength influence will be led by this phenomenon.
To conclude, by my agrument from the essay that i totally agree with this statement, but it still have some positive aspect for the teenager. The manager of education need to have clear plans to improve their students for the nation development.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, still, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1543.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37630662021 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96774127142 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616724738676 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1195365306 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.214285714 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0901095059204 0.244688304435 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0370481665152 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657095999927 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0605649634387 0.151304729494 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459195963008 0.056905535591 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.97 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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