Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones.
Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative
development
It’s increasingly common to see children using phones for a long hours. There are several reasons behind this situation and i find this development more negative than positive
The first reason for overusage of smart phone by children is the benifit of hybrid social networks.They often use social netwoking applications such as fb,tiktok, instagram... to be able to connect with friends and spend a lot of time chatting each other.The second reason children usephones is to play games,but the games childrens often play are violent and scary.These 2 reasons are both entertaining for children but it can also be nagative as it take away the time that should be spent on other activites such as homework ,sports...Beside it also affect the healths of children such as eyes or psycology when spending a lot of time on social network and making children lose focus in learning activities
To sum up,parents need to adjust their children’s phone use time so they should let them do more outdoor activities
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...s the benifit of hybrid social networks.They often use social netwoking applications...
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...spend a lot of time chatting each other.The second reason children usephones is to ...
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...ason children usephones is to play games,but the games childrens often play are viol...
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...ldrens often play are violent and scary.These 2 reasons are both entertaining for chi...
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...pent on other activites such as homework ,sports...Beside it also affect the healt...
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...ould let them do more outdoor activities
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 41.998997996 45% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 847.0 1615.20841683 52% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 166.0 315.596192385 53% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10240963855 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 4.20363070211 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90046947612 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 176.041082164 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.668674698795 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 259.2 506.74238477 51% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 16.0721442886 19% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 55.0 20.2975951904 271% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 239.553751797 49.4020404114 485% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 282.333333333 106.682146367 265% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 55.3333333333 20.7667163134 266% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 17.3333333333 7.06120827912 245% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167266419298 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104843206067 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536658151942 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131361588794 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0709343259681 0.056905535591 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 30.3 13.0946893788 231% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 15.65 50.2224549098 31% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.7 11.3001002004 219% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.19 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.36 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 78.4519038076 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 24.0 10.1190380762 237% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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