• Task 1: The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts give the information about the proportion of 60 -64 years old men and women in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000.
Overall, the percentage of women aged 60-64 in employment did not show any remarkable change between 1970 and 2000 while there is an upward trend in the figure for men. Moreover, the percentage of men overwhelmed that of women in four countries in1970 and 2000.
It is substantial that about four-fifth men aged 60-64 were employed in Japan in 1970, roughly twice as much as the figure for women in both two years surveyed, before going down to 74 percent in 2000. With only around 7%, Belgium had the lowest proportion of 60-64 year old female employees and witnessed a sharp decrease of 60% in male employees aged 60-64 in 2000.
In addition, the USA and Australia show a significant fall of 18% and 29%, respectively in 2000. Interestingly, the percentage of female employees aged 60-64 in the USA was around 39% in 1970 and 2000, about twice as much as that in Australia.
- Task 2 Some people think that too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings so we should knock down old buildings and build modern ones instead To what extent do you agree or disagree 61
- Task 1 The plans show the change of a small theater in 2010 and 2012 73
- Task 2 In some countries more and more adults continue to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages 73
- Task 1 The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60 64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 73
- Task 1 The charts below give information about children under 18 learning musical instruments in one region of the UK in 1996 and 2016 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 61
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, while, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 840.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 179.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69273743017 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64978845539 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 106.607317073 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525139664804 0.547539520022 96% => OK
syllable_count: 232.2 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.527317147 43.030603864 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.0 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5714285714 22.9334400587 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.23603664747 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.399453748629 0.215688989381 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.216961216044 0.103423049105 210% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0951612229574 0.0843802449381 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.285492333051 0.15604864568 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.090193083977 0.0819641961636 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.48 61.2550243902 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 11.4140731707 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, while, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 840.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 179.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69273743017 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64978845539 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 106.607317073 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525139664804 0.547539520022 96% => OK
syllable_count: 232.2 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.527317147 43.030603864 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.0 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5714285714 22.9334400587 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.23603664747 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.399453748629 0.215688989381 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.216961216044 0.103423049105 210% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0951612229574 0.0843802449381 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.285492333051 0.15604864568 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.090193083977 0.0819641961636 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.48 61.2550243902 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 11.4140731707 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.