It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?
In life, people cannot avoid trouble, so we need to learn to take risks both in our professional lives and personal lives. In my opinion, this trend could have both positive and negative consequences but taking risks bring more benefits than drawbacks. In this essay, I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of risk-taking and offer my opinion.
To begin with, I will talk about the drawback of this attitude, first is in work. If people take risks but do not calculate carefully, they will create some damages. For example, when a singer plan to shoot MV, they need to take risks such as get in troubles with weather, or a scene must record again and again. Following this, when they let their risks repeat many time, their loss can raise to a large number of cost. From a daily life perspective, risk-taking could make people only focus on the negatives while overlooking all the possibilities, therefore, the fear of starting would rise up. For instance, a student have a passion for drawing and she want to enroll entrance exam of an art university but she meet a lot of obstacles when practicing so she decide to choose a more secure career path.
However, we can have many merits from accept risks. One of the main positives is it help us avoid disappointment and discouragement when we fail. As an example, when someone struggles in their job but they have the mindset of risk-taking, they will not shocked and depressed, they could anticipate potential risks. Another major advantages is people would have to enrich their knowledge consecutively on their life-long learning journey. For instance, a group of students go into the forest to learn about mushrooms must have enough knowledge about all the mushrooms that they will meet, otherwise they will be poisoned which is one of the risks. In addition, we can see that people who accept risks will able to improvise and adapt well. For example, a leader with risk-taking skill can an adapt well in many different situations then they can lead their members the best way.
In conclusion, take risks have both advantages and disadvantages. In my viewpoint, the advantages are outweigh the disadvantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 7.85571142285 280% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 368.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92663043478 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77039476135 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551630434783 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9107090979 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.722222222 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4444444444 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.38888888889 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352627843437 0.244688304435 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120036971829 0.084324248473 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0904338485366 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241380330129 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0658249901825 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.