In many countries, the government spends a large amount money on the arts. Some people agree with this. However, others think the government should spend more on healthcare and education.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
There is ongoing debate about the distribution of national funds and whether it should be diverted to the arts or healthcare and education. While some contend that more financial resources should be directed towards the arts, others argue that monetary initiatives should be allocated to medical services and education. Although both viewpoints hold significant merits, I lean more toward the latter for the following reasons.
On the one hand, one compelling reason for investing in the arts is the potential economic growth. Specifically, arts constitute a means of cultural preservation, prompting tourism activities in the fields of cultural and heritage. For instance, numerous paintings depicting the resilience and unity of the Vietnamese people during the American war have been publicized widely. These masterpieces serving as a means of historical preservation have attracted many international tourists arriving in Vietnam, leading to exponential growth in the tourism industry of this country. As a result, governments should continue investing in the arts to gain more economic values.
On the other hand, others argue that medical treatments and education are the main focus of government subsidies. The rapid pace of globalization has led to the widespread transmission of many deadly viruses, which can exert detrimental effects on human health. For instance, the outbreak of COVID-19 in early 2020 claimed thousands of lives across the globe, necessitating government investment to roll out vaccines to curb its widespread transmission. Furthermore, the influx of migrants from rural areas to more affluent places has contributed to a rising demand for education, requiring governments to establish new institutions to address the needs of residents. As a result, it is imperative for governments to invest in education and healthcare services to prevent emerging issues, such as rising illiteracy rates.
In conclusion, although both perspectives hold notable benefits, I advocate that healthcare and education should be the primary focus of government funding. While medical treatments safeguard the survival of many individuals, education can provide them with precious opportunities to advance in their future careers. Therefore, such investment in these two sectors can foster sustainable and prosperous growth.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1993.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.76011560694 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13891593985 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586705202312 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7996582015 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.5625 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.625 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4375 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237992152454 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072531390752 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382058196407 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132794161774 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0119338958448 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.13 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.52 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 78.4519038076 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.