In many countries today, if people want to find work, they have to move away from their families and friends. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
The tendency of leaving relatives for better career prospects has increasingly become prevalent in a myriad of countries. Although this development has enormous benefits, I argue that its downsides surpass advantages for the following reasons.
On the one hand, moving away from families and friends for job seeking can provide individuals with better economic opportunities. The interconnected transport network in affluent areas has attracted numerous companies and enterprises to locate their headquarters and production sites, offering a broader spectrum of available job vacancies. As a result, if individuals migrate to these places, the chance to secure a permanent job is relatively higher than that in their hometown, which can economically sustain their survival. For instance, due to the economic vibrancy in Hanoi, an influx of rural residents has left their hometown for Hanoi to seek better living standards.
Nevertheless, this tendency potentially exerts some severe impacts on individuals and society. First and foremost, the migration pattern to metropolitan areas for job opportunities can leave the countryside derelict. When residents leave their homes for more affluent cities, their hometowns can experience workforce shortage, which disrupts the agricultural practices. As a result, this disruption can induce a reduction in the number of crops, threatening food security and society as a whole. Additionally, living away relatives and friends may have a negative influence on the existing relationship among individuals. For instance, many couples who are in long distance relationships have undergone conflicts and arguments stemming from distrust and misunderstandings.
In conclusion, although this tendency can offer individuals superior economic benefits, I argue that the drawbacks far outweighs the advantages concerning its influences on relationships and society. When people opt for living away from home, the physical distance can result in conflicts and the lack of trust among couples as a result of inadequate communications. Also, this trend can leave many areas underdeveloped and abandoned owing to the lack of workforce.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, nevertheless, so, as for, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1854.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.84858044164 5.12529762239 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2505219249 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574132492114 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 2.10420841683 333% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5190824589 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.6 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1333333333 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86666666667 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161456551553 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564564535707 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.038958969162 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0991450315749 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213116641089 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.65 12.4159519038 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.61 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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