Some people think that sense of competition should be encouraged in children. However, others consider cooperation more important to make them good adults. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Some people would argue that children should be encouraged to have a sense of competition, while for others, it is the matter of being cooperative that raises a good adult. In this essay, both of these views shall be discussed along with the author’s personal thoughts.
To begin with, being competitive is a trait often seen in smart, sensitive children, therefore should be encouraged. Competing with other kids would make a child more mature psychologically. Encouraging a child to be competitive, however, has its downside as well. Take moving out at an early age for example. They definitely become more independent that way, but the situation forces the child to grow up too soon, affecting its psychology. The child loses its childhood as a result, eventually causing them to suffer from depression and overthinking.
On the other hand, a cooperative trait helps the child to connect with its friends more easily. Kids with more friends usually have a good social life, and eventually grow up to be better adults. They won’t have to face adult problems as early, and instead, have more positive, optimistic thoughts. In return, however, these kids usually behave childishly, always thinking for others rather than themselves. If not properly raised, these kids could turn out to be manipulated, used, and not capable of claiming their rights.
In conclusion, either a sense of competition or cooperation has certain impacts on a child’s behavior, shaping them into a grown adult who could be either good or bad. I personally side with the cooperative approach, just so that the kid could have a complete childhood, happy time with family, and fulfilled dreams.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 169, Rule ID: EN_GB_SIMPLE_REPLACE
Message: I is a common American expression, in British English it is more common to use: I
Suggestion: I
... adult who could be either good or bad. I personally side with the cooperative ap...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1412.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17216117216 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85485961178 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615384615385 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5694305383 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1333333333 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.93333333333 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301902382806 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0947623179519 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0754380158463 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193559366743 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0902771880664 0.056905535591 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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