It is better for children if the whole families ( e.g aunts , uncles and grandparents ) are involved in the children's upbringing , rather than their fathers and mothers only . Do you agree or disagree with this opinion ?
The rising trend of nuclear families and its effect on today's children has led to the question whether children should be raised in joint families in which aunts , uncles and grandparents contribute in bringing up children . Although a joint family is better in raising children . A number of arguments surround my opinion .
To begin with , in a joint family , children's upbringing becomes very easy as there are so many people to take care of the child . So being the mother or father , even if you are busy in life with work or any other commitments , you have no need to worry about your child as you know he/she will be taken care of , fed properly and even made sure that homework is completed . This is a huge relief especially in times of sickness of the child . So in a joint family , you can be totally focused as far as your career or work is concerned , without the tension of your children .
Secondly , a joint family teaches the value of adjusting and flexibility , which can go a long way in life when such children marry or when they have to live an independent life in a totally new or different environment , which unfortunately people brought up in a nuclear family with all comforts and less adjustments might find difficult . Children living in joint family learn how to deal with people and understand the dynamics of human psychology , as they are staying with various people of different attitude , perception and behaviour . In the long run , it becomes easy to gauge and understand people and their emotions .
Finally , parents do not have to deal with attention-related problems which are usually by-products of nuclear family systems , where the child , finding both parents absent and no one else from the family , usually resorts to attention seeking behavior . Such behaviour can manifest as being sad , insolent , and reclusive among other things .
To put it in a nutshell , I pen down saying that , in a joint family a child is reared by a number of people , thus dividing work and saving time . The child also learns quantities of understanding , adjusting , & selflessness . For working parents , it's a blessing to have reliable , trustworthy caretakers for their child . Therefore it is better to raise a child in a joint family .
- Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed ( damaged ) by human activity . Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live . What is your opinion ? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer . 70
- In some countries students are required to learn a foreign language but in other countries it is not necessary to do so Discuss the benefits of each case and give your own opinion 80
- Some people believe that university students should be rquired to attend classes . Others believe that going to classes should be optional for students . Which point of view do you agree with ? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer . 61
- Biotechnology companies all over the world are developing different types of genetically modified ( GM ) crops . However ,not enough is known about these crops on our health and the environment . Interfering with nature in this way should be prohibited . 73
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'you know', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.229357798165 0.247107183377 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.153669724771 0.155533422707 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0917431192661 0.0946595960268 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0550458715596 0.0501214627716 110% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0412844036697 0.0437548338989 94% => OK
Prepositions: 0.123853211009 0.122226691241 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0435779816514 0.0403226058552 108% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.8394815987 2.80594681477 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0275229357798 0.0326793684256 84% => OK
Particles: 0.00688073394495 0.00163938923432 420% => Less particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0802752293578 0.0861772015684 93% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0137614678899 0.021408717616 64% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0183486238532 0.011925033212 154% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2321.0 1933.35771543 120% => OK
No of words: 424.0 316.048096192 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47405660377 6.12580529183 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.20517956788 108% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.308962264151 0.374742101984 82% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.221698113208 0.28420135186 78% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.155660377358 0.203846283523 76% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0872641509434 0.137316102897 64% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8394815987 2.80594681477 101% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.037074148 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471698113208 0.56093040696 84% => OK
Word variations: 51.6729247359 60.7387585426 85% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0891783567 99% => OK
Sentence length: 26.5 20.7743622355 128% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.21312894 49.517814964 172% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.0625 127.492653851 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 20.7743622355 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6875 0.814263465372 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 52.0 3.99599198397 1301% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 48.6698113208 49.1944974215 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.5871559633 1.69124875643 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328676881326 0.332605444948 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0965784646961 0.102741220458 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0744732188902 0.0668466124924 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.575049381297 0.534860350844 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.182940425549 0.148594505496 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13051921437 0.134430193775 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604057866397 0.0742795772207 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.265562806633 0.324371583561 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0583818401319 0.0638462369009 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206021278652 0.228012699653 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0576857424938 0.058150111329 99% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.68436873747 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.41683366733 59% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 5.90881763527 186% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 10.4468937876 134% => OK
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9