The following appeared in a memo from the new vice president of Sartorian, a company that manufactures men's clothing.
"Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulties in obtaining reliable supplies of high-quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our deluxe alpaca overcoats.
Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. This coat should sell very well: since we have not offered an alpaca overcoat for
five years and since our major competitor no longer makes an alpaca overcoat, there will be pent-up customer demand.
Also, since the price of most types of clothing has risen in each of the past five years, customers should be willing to pay
significantly higher prices for alpaca overcoats than they did five years ago, and our company profits will increase."
The new vice president of Sartorian claims that resuming production of,once discontinued,alpaca overcoat will now act as a "CASH COW" ,since there are no major
competitiors. The argument is flawed for numerous reasons.
Firstly, the vice president does not provide any evidence regarding the new fabric supplier. Whether the supplier provides high quality wool fabric is not explained.
The problem for discontinuing five years ago may be,perhaps,beyond supplier support and may not be reliable even today.Besides, without evidence to the contrary it is entirely possible that
Sartorian's new supplier will turn out to be unreliable and to be blameworthy for that unreliability.
Secondly,the vice president does not provide any evidence whether alpaca coat is still popular among customers. Since all its competitors no longer make alpaca coat,
it can be assumed that people have lost interest in alpaca coat and have started buying new,perhaps better quality coats. Because major competitors have opted out from
making alpaca coats does not indicate there will be increased customer demands. Customers predilections change from time to time.Customers may have lost interest in alpaca coats
and hence other clothing manufactures have moved onto making different and more creative products to meet customer demands.
Finally, even if vice president can substantiate the foregoing propositions,the argument relies on additional assumption that customers will be willing to pay
significantly higher prices for alpaca coats than they did five years ago.Rise is prices of most types of clothings does not indicate that alpaca coats will attract large
prices. May be other clothing involve higher production costs compared to alpaca coats and hence have increased prices.Establishing proportionality between other clothing and
alpaca coat without proper facts and evidences will turn out to be specious. Even if customers are willing to pay more for alpaca coats five years ago does not indicate
company profits will increase.May be only few customers are willing to pay more than previous price. Unless these values are quantified,it becomes significantly difficult
to conform the vice president's argument.
Finally, even if Sartorian would turn a profit from the sale of its alpaca coats, the memo's claim that the company's overall profits would increase thereby is unwarranted.
Sartorian's overall profitability is a function of revenue and expenses relating to all of Sartorian's products. Since the memo provides no evidence that Sartorian
will continue to be profitable in other respects, it is difficult to take the vice president's argument seriously.
Because the argument makes several unwarranted assumptions,it fails to make a convincing case.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...t will now act as a 'CASH COW' ,since there are no major competitiors....
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...nt makes several unwarranted assumptions,it fails to make a convincing case.
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'regarding', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.267818574514 0.25644967241 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.190064794816 0.15541462614 122% => OK
Adjectives: 0.107991360691 0.0836205057962 129% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0691144708423 0.0520304965353 133% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0172786177106 0.0272364105082 63% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0993520518359 0.125424944231 79% => OK
Participles: 0.0475161987041 0.0416121511921 114% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.13430904768 2.79052419416 112% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0323974082073 0.026700313972 121% => OK
Particles: 0.00647948164147 0.001811407834 358% => OK
Determiners: 0.0647948164147 0.113004496875 57% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0323974082073 0.0255425247493 127% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0 0.0127820249294 0% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2790.0 2731.13054187 102% => OK
No of words: 414.0 446.07635468 93% => OK
Chars per words: 6.73913043478 6.12365571057 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.442028985507 0.378187486979 117% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.357487922705 0.287650121315 124% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.277777777778 0.208842608468 133% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.164251207729 0.135150697306 122% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13430904768 2.79052419416 112% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 207.018472906 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492753623188 0.469332199767 105% => OK
Word variations: 54.2623963351 52.1807786196 104% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 24.3529411765 23.2022227129 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.0927630692 57.7814097925 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.117647059 141.986410481 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3529411765 23.2022227129 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.705882352941 0.724660767414 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 19.0 5.14285714286 369% => There are something wrong with the essay format.
Language errors: 25.0 3.58251231527 698% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 60.101733447 51.9672348444 116% => OK
Elegance: 1.5 1.8405768891 81% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237892170978 0.441005458295 54% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.119595235815 0.135418324435 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0681041954872 0.0829849096947 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.766342416538 0.58762219726 130% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.233970427119 0.147661913831 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0975401779429 0.193483328276 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616561454141 0.0970749176394 64% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.122317258783 0.42659136922 29% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0723059025077 0.0774707102158 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0902044385128 0.312017818177 29% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.061973402964 0.0698173142475 89% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.87684729064 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 6.46551724138 108% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 14.657635468 109% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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