THE FOLLOWING IS THE SPEECH BY THE PRESIDENT OF BEST CHARITY CLUB TO HER CLUB MEMBERS.
"THREE MONTHS AGO, THE CHARITY FOR YOUTH CLUB HELD A BAKE SALE AT THE ANNUAL FOURTH OF JULY BASH IN TOWN. THEY RAISED OVER
$2,000. OUR CLUB BUDGET CURRENTLY HAS A DEFICIT OF $1,000, AND WE HAVE SOME PENDING PURCHASES AND CONTRIBUTIONS WHICH TOTAL OVER
$1,OOO. THIS BRING OUR MONETARY NEEDS TO $2,000. WE SHOULD HOLD A BAKE SALE AT THE ANNUAL CHRISMTMAS PARTY AT
THE CIVIC CENTER IN ORDER TO THE FUNDS WE NEED TO COVER THESE COSTS."
Considered true in many proven cases; a charity programme has often lived up to its target of collecting good funds for
the given purpose. Recently, the president of Best charity club has given a speech to her club members stating they ought
to hold a bake sale at the auspicious occasion of the annual christmas at the civic center to collect the fund to
cover their cost which is mainly based on the fact that youth club did a similar charity program and were able to collect
the fund. But her assumption is full of fallacies as she fails to consider many other prevailing factors and the premise
is not complete to support her assumptions and to get to her conclusions of surety of collection of funds.
She assumes that they can duplicate the results of the youth club. However, the concern of people towards charity for
various reasons may not be same. Neither it is clearly stated about the motive of their charity program, nor the process.
They might have conducted the program on some moving motives as in case of Anti-cancer issues, child-care issues.
This kind of motives touches several people and may influence to reach to the wallets. The same cannot be expected for
political issues as people tend to be biased or cynic towards politics.
More so, the president assumes that the christmas would be the good time, but simply fails to consider christmas is not same as the fourth of july as in christmas people may have more need of money for themselves to decorate houses, celebrate the festival and may not be willing to spend towards the charity. Similarly for the place , there is a certain amount of fallacy in assumptions of the civic center would be profitable for charity while no clear evidence is seen on the statement
about which part of the civic the other party used. The president again overlooked the minor details and the fact that selection of the place or the part has a lot to do with the collection ; if the charity programmes is conducted on more crowded places, obviously more people will interact and more chances of collection as compared to less crowded place.
In addition to the place and time factor, one other major false assumption seems to be in the case of profit margin:
she is so sure of the profits that she even didn't think of considering the costs that will incur during the making of
bakes. There is no certain proofs that all the bakes will be sold and forget the profits but the cost might be retained.
Though charity programme annually raises a lot of funds for various charitable and humane causes, often more in special
occasions but the statement of the president seems overly ambitious and unreachable as it is full of number of fallacies
and consideration which have no guarantee to uphold and totally dependent on what others did. She seems to simply copy
it without thorough examination. But again, charity programme has a been major fund raiser since some time and if used
intellectually can provide some good funds.
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- There is little justification for society to make extraordinary efforts—especially at a great cost in money and jobs—to save endangered animal or plant species. 50
- Rituals and ceremonies help to define a culture Without them societies or groups of people have a diminished sense of who they are 35
- THE FOLLOWING IS THE SPEECH BY THE PRESIDENT OF BEST CHARITY CLUB TO HER CLUB MEMBERS THREE MONTHS AGO THE CHARITY FOR YOUTH CLUB HELD A BAKE SALE AT THE ANNUAL FOURTH OF JULY BASH IN TOWN THEY RAISED OVER 2 000 OUR CLUB BUDGET CURRENTLY HAS A DEFICIT OF 64
- AS PEOPLE RELY MORE AND MORE ON TECHNOLOGY TO SOLVE THE PROBLEMS, THE ABILITY OF HUMANS TO THINK FORTHEMSELVES WILL SURELY DETERIORATE. 54
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'similarly', 'so', 'while', 'in addition', 'kind of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.249547920434 0.25644967241 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.155515370705 0.15541462614 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0886075949367 0.0836205057962 106% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0506329113924 0.0520304965353 97% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0343580470163 0.0272364105082 126% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.128390596745 0.125424944231 102% => OK
Participles: 0.0397830018083 0.0416121511921 96% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.4920485401 2.79052419416 89% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0397830018083 0.026700313972 149% => OK
Particles: 0.00180831826401 0.001811407834 100% => OK
Determiners: 0.108499095841 0.113004496875 96% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0271247739602 0.0255425247493 106% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00904159132007 0.0127820249294 71% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3019.0 2731.13054187 111% => OK
No of words: 522.0 446.07635468 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.78352490421 6.12365571057 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.57801047555 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.329501915709 0.378187486979 87% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.249042145594 0.287650121315 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.141762452107 0.208842608468 68% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.105363984674 0.135150697306 78% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4920485401 2.79052419416 89% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 207.018472906 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475095785441 0.469332199767 101% => OK
Word variations: 55.6856178792 52.1807786196 107% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 30.7058823529 23.2022227129 132% => OK
Sentence length SD: 99.0152901408 57.7814097925 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 177.588235294 141.986410481 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7058823529 23.2022227129 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.588235294118 0.724660767414 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 21.0 5.14285714286 408% => There are something wrong with the essay format.
Language errors: 13.0 3.58251231527 363% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 55.6100969123 51.9672348444 107% => OK
Elegance: 1.73684210526 1.8405768891 94% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.518140694369 0.441005458295 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.138295513403 0.135418324435 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0792076368646 0.0829849096947 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.780935964313 0.58762219726 133% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.247681805592 0.147661913831 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.225146337339 0.193483328276 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129565609198 0.0970749176394 133% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.158663662368 0.42659136922 37% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.110565988526 0.0774707102158 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204654581468 0.312017818177 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135851143439 0.0698173142475 195% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.33743842365 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.87684729064 29% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 6.46551724138 139% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 14.657635468 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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