“Prevention is better than cure”. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree?
The investment on researching and experiments to cure the maladies is required a huge amount of money. As a result of this, some people claims that the prevention for maladies is more important and should invest on preventative measures. Even though the prevention seems the most optimistic way to achieve, in finance perspective, I believe that this is unrealistic and therefore, I completely disagree with this approach. I think the research for treating diseases is still required.
Investing on preparation and prevention for diseases is better, because it is cheaper than spending money for researching and treating diseases. If the government only focuses on their money on prevention, the costs involving with the prevention project would be lesser, because all they have to do is find the way to improve people’s immune systems. In comparison to this, if the scientists treating for diseases then, the scientists would have to tackle down for all diseases, which would take a lot of time for researching on diseases and finding the cure can be expensive.
In contrast, investing on the prevention for potential diseases is difficult to achieve because the insufficient research had been done. In other words, it is unrealistic to prevent the diseases since new diseases are spreading every year. For example, the whole world had feared from SARS in 2012, by 2015 it was MERS and now the world is feared for the new diseases called ZIKA viruses. So to prevent for all those “newly developed” viruses is impossible to achieve. Hence, the cost for prevention would even more than actual cure for diseases.
In conclusion, the prevention for all potential diseases would be the dream for everyone. However, practically preventing for all diseases would be difficult to achieve since the insufficient technological and research facilities and knowledge. Therefore, prevention cannot be achieved realistically and the investment on research for treating illness should be continued.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Discourse Markers used:
['hence', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'therefore', 'for example', 'i think', 'in conclusion', 'in contrast', 'as a result', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.214484679666 0.247107183377 87% => OK
Verbs: 0.186629526462 0.155533422707 120% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0640668523677 0.0946595960268 68% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0529247910864 0.0501214627716 106% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0222841225627 0.0437548338989 51% => OK
Prepositions: 0.142061281337 0.122226691241 116% => OK
Participles: 0.0696378830084 0.0403226058552 173% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.0667981174 2.80594681477 109% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0306406685237 0.0326793684256 94% => OK
Particles: 0.00278551532033 0.00163938923432 170% => OK
Determiners: 0.108635097493 0.0861772015684 126% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0278551532033 0.021408717616 130% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00278551532033 0.011925033212 23% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2004.0 1933.35771543 104% => OK
No of words: 315.0 316.048096192 100% => OK
Chars per words: 6.3619047619 6.12580529183 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20517956788 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.4 0.374742101984 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.342857142857 0.28420135186 121% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.285714285714 0.203846283523 140% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.190476190476 0.137316102897 139% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0667981174 2.80594681477 109% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.037074148 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495238095238 0.56093040696 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 49.91270757 60.7387585426 82% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0891783567 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.7743622355 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.121096643 49.517814964 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.6 127.492653851 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7743622355 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.866666666667 0.814263465372 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 55.2857142857 49.1944974215 112% => OK
Elegance: 1.62765957447 1.69124875643 96% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326914939308 0.332605444948 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.164576297821 0.102741220458 160% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0662639014204 0.0668466124924 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.600448252863 0.534860350844 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.102335901492 0.148594505496 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157487109528 0.134430193775 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580253397627 0.0742795772207 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.484351800543 0.324371583561 149% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0448472400586 0.0638462369009 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237396899515 0.228012699653 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556785800249 0.058150111329 96% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.68436873747 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41683366733 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 5.90881763527 85% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.5751503006 155% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 1.9629258517 153% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 10.4468937876 115% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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