It is undeniable that Television advertisement is a popular topic which has caused heated debates over a long period of time because it affects everybody in his daily lives. Depending on personal experience, personality type and emotional concern, people differ greatly in their attitudes towards this issue. We find that some people holds the idea that Television advertisement directed to young children should not be allowed; in contrary, others maintain the idea that there is not any difference among audiences and it should be permitted to broadcast. In my opinion, such advertisements should be banned to broadcast for young children. There exist countless factors that supports this opinion; two of those are increasing conflicts between parents and children and directing children behaviors and demands.
The main aspect is that arising conflicts between parents and children. Children at earlier stages of their life can not completely understand legal and reasons which explain by their parents. So imagine young children want to have some advertised product which parents think that it is not suitable for their children for some reasons. If they explain their reasons to children, it is expected that their children did not understand and accept it and it can be an annoying conflict between them.
Additionally, another reason which can be point out is that Television advertisement can inappropriately change and direct children consuming behavior. For instance, a few days ago I and my brother who aged four, went out to the cinema and when I want to buy a milk from a shop for him he wants to eat a snake from a brand which frequently advertised in Television and It is clear that snake is a harmful product specially for children but he did not accept it and finally he can impose me to buy it for him!
In summary, although some people claim that Television advertisement can be showed to young children, I am of the opinion that this advertisements must not be allowed to broadcast for young children.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'if', 'so', 'for instance', 'in summary', 'in my opinion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.218487394958 0.229887763892 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.18487394958 0.158761421928 116% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0700280112045 0.0866891130778 81% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0448179271709 0.046263068375 97% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0868347338936 0.0685040099705 127% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.120448179272 0.118717715034 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0420168067227 0.0351676179071 119% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.88235105205 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.03081232493 0.0309702414327 99% => OK
Particles: 0.00280112044818 0.00188951952338 148% => OK
Determiners: 0.0672268907563 0.0887237588012 76% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0280112044818 0.0209618222197 134% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0252100840336 0.0139019557991 181% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2024.0 2387.08602151 85% => OK
No of words: 333.0 408.028673835 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.07807807808 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48200974243 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.378378378378 0.338922669872 112% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.306306306306 0.251872472559 122% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.225225225225 0.174417080927 129% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.144144144144 0.112833075102 128% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88235105205 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522522522523 0.524397521467 100% => OK
Word variations: 54.8250508686 59.2087087015 93% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6684587814 58% => OK
Sentence length: 27.75 20.5533526081 135% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.8028158796 48.84282405 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.666666667 120.699889404 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.75 20.5533526081 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.583333333333 0.644075263715 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 58.3806306306 45.7405998639 128% => OK
Elegance: 1.20353982301 1.45489161554 83% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274196448413 0.300154397459 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.155003053794 0.103427244359 150% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0878211853408 0.0752933317313 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.586207978491 0.497263757937 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.206826075684 0.151897553556 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126596181913 0.114077575197 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0987290997764 0.0781384742642 126% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.335997116328 0.336927656856 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0694860738131 0.067059652881 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209673542598 0.210909579961 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0724668642714 0.0618886996521 117% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8870967742 25% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 8.42114695341 36% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.4623655914 244% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 13.6433691756 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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